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Some people think that public libraries are not necessary today. Buy some feel that they r still providing some useful services. Discuss both the issues from your opinion. v.1

Some people think that public libraries are not necessary today. Buy some feel that they r still providing some useful services. v. 1
At present there are a lot of opinions toward the ways of living. One proportion of people lean to a stability and change nothing, while the other one believes that changes have only positive sides. I believe that both philosophies are worth considering in terms of types of changes. First, individuals living stable and avoiding new things likely strongly believe that they need nothing, and all goals were already achieved. I suppose that such personalities do not see the ways for a progress and try not to break the way of living they built. On the one hand it is far convenient to predict the future in terms of loans, taxes and holidays, but it is believed that such life can gradually transform into a routine and become annoying. Second, people who are opting to changes believe in beneficial progress, that means opportunity to improve skills or gaining new meetings. Some people behave in a slightly risky style becoming too, preferring to unknown deals. For example, there is a lot of money lost by people who try to earn easily via trading on the online platforms. On this occasion, trading is obviously new for a prevalent number of people and lack of competences may take a negative side. Nevertheless it is a fact that most well-being people gained their prosperity by assessment of early untouched businesses. Well-known businessman Richard Branson never holds a technical position but successful in airplane and railway business. In conclusion, both types of personalities have advantages and shortcomings as well. I far more apt to change lovers because there are a great many opportunities appears and it is necessary to change the ambience as well as gain new skills in order to catch up with a modern pace of life.
At present there are
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a lot of
opinions toward the ways of living. One proportion of
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people
lean to a stability and
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change
nothing, while the other one
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believes
that
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changes
have
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only
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positive
sides. I
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believe
that both philosophies are worth considering in terms of types of
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changes
.

First
, individuals living stable and avoiding
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new
things likely
strongly
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believe
that they need nothing, and all goals were already achieved. I suppose that such personalities do not
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see
the ways for a progress and try not to break the way of living they built. On the one hand it is far convenient to predict the future in terms of loans, taxes and holidays,
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but
it
is believed
that such life can
gradually
transform into a routine and become annoying.

Second,
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people
who are opting to
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changes
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believe
in beneficial progress, that means opportunity to
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improve
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skills
or gaining
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new
meetings.
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Some
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people
behave in a
slightly
risky style becoming too, preferring to unknown deals.
For example
, there is
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a lot of
money lost by
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people
who try to earn
easily
via trading on the online platforms. On this occasion, trading is
obviously
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new
for a prevalent number of
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people
and lack of competences may take a
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negative
side.
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Nevertheless
it is a fact that most well-being
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people
gained their prosperity by assessment of early untouched businesses. Well-known businessman Richard
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Branson
never holds a technical position
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but
successful in airplane and railway business.

In conclusion
, both types of personalities have advantages and shortcomings
as well
. I far more apt to
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change
lovers
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because
there are a great
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many
opportunities appears and it is necessary to
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change
the ambience
as well
as gain
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new
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skills
in order to catch up with a modern pace of life.
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IELTS essay Some people think that public libraries are not necessary today. Buy some feel that they r still providing some useful services. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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