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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.7

Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. v. 7
Any library that is accessible for the general public and is usually funded from public sources like taxes is known as a public library. In my opinion, public libraries have certainly lost some of their importance; however, this does not mean that they are no longer needed. (45) We had seen in the past that people always spend some time in the public libraries on a daily basis. Public libraries were considered a symbol of literate and educated population. In short, public libraries were the greatest source of reliable knowledge in the past. (44) Presently, the public libraries are available in almost all the parts of the world. Nowadays, people of any age like to get a public library membership in order to access a wide range of books, magazines and newspapers free of cost. Moreover, the public libraries do not only offered all kinds of study materials, but also provide an excellent environment for studies. On the other hand, the invention of computer and internet has certainly reduced the number of public library users. It is now possible for people to study books of their own choice and read newspapers over the internet instead of moving towards public libraries. (104) The recent development in Science and Information technology has enabled the people to study any material over the internet. Thus, if the people keep on preferring online study, then the public libraries will surely lose their importance in the near future. (41) Hence, in my opinion, although the public libraries have lost some of their importance, however, they are still needed because they have old books and manuscripts that are not available online. (31)
Any library
that is
accessible for the general
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public
and is
usually
funded from
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public
sources like taxes
is known
as a
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public
library. In my opinion,
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public
libraries have
certainly
lost
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some
of their importance;
however
, this does not mean that they are no longer needed. (45)

We had
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seen
in the past that
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people
always spend
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some
time in the
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public
libraries on a daily basis.
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Public
libraries
were considered
a symbol of literate and educated population. In short,
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public
libraries were the greatest source of reliable knowledge in the past. (44)

Presently
, the
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public
libraries are available in almost all the parts of the world. Nowadays,
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people
of any age like to
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get
a
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public
library membership in order to access a wide range of books, magazines and newspapers free of cost.
Moreover
, the
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public
libraries do not
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only
offered all kinds of
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study
materials,
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but
also
provide an excellent environment for
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studies
.
On the other hand
, the invention of computer and internet has
certainly
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reduced
the number of
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public
library users. It is
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now
possible for
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people
to
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study
books of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice and read newspapers over the internet
instead
of moving towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries. (104)

The recent development in Science and Information technology has enabled the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
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study
any material over the internet.
Thus
, if the
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people
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keep
on preferring online
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study
, then the
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public
libraries will
surely
lose their importance in the near future. (41)

Hence
, in my opinion, although the
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public
libraries have lost
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some
of their importance,
however
, they are
still
needed
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because
they have
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old
books and manuscripts that are not available online. (31)
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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