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some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government makes laws regarding nutritious food but other things that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibilities discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government makes laws regarding nutritious food but other things that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibilities v. 1
Strong interpersonal skills are essential for succeeding in today's workplace. However, employers are facing difficulties to seek out candidates who have strong soft skills. A few reasons can be absence of self-confidence and reluctant to network. This essay will discuss this problem in detail with improvement techniques like practicing good communication skills and be a good listener. People often don't have healthy interpersonal relationships because they do not know what they looks like. Plenty of us have been raised in an environment where we are controlled, invalidated, punished or disrespected. This results in lack of confidence in ourselves. Moreover, the other party uses certain manipulation tactics to keep us trapped and confused. For example, leadership at work can influence their resources and held them guilty for their incorrect decision. Another problem for lack of social skills in office is refusing to talk to others. This kind of people don't feel need to appreciate others in their good work and so will not get a chance to know others. They do not learn how to speak about their achievements with influential leaders who can help them to soar higher. In order to solve this problem, one of the possible solution is to practice public speaking. For instance, whether you work in IT, customer service, construction, or any other industry, you will need to be able to communicate clearly and effectively. This can be achieved by attending some training and taking part in various conferences. Another fix is good active listening. While you need to be able to express your own ideas, you also need to thoughtfully listen to the ideas of others. This will help your client, employers and management feel respected and valued. In conclusion, there are some issues with workers such as lack of confidence and networking skills. Therefore, employers are finding difficulty in searching potential candidate with good soft skills. It can be improved using proper guidance or techniques like improving speaking and being a good listener.
Strong interpersonal
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skills
are essential for succeeding in
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today
's workplace.
However
, employers are facing difficulties to seek out candidates who have strong soft
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skills
. A few reasons can be absence of self-confidence and reluctant to network. This essay will discuss this problem in detail with improvement techniques like practicing
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good
communication
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skills
and be a
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good
listener.

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People
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often
don't have healthy interpersonal relationships
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because
they do not know what they
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looks
like.
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Plenty
of us have
been raised
in an environment where we
are controlled
, invalidated, punished or disrespected. This results in lack of confidence in ourselves.
Moreover
, the
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other
party
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uses
certain manipulation tactics to
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keep
us trapped and confused.
For example
, leadership at work can influence their resources and held them
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guilty for
their incorrect decision. Another problem for lack of social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in office is refusing to talk to others. This kind of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
don't feel
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need
to appreciate others in their
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good
work and
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so
will not
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get
a chance to know others. They do not learn how to speak about their achievements with influential leaders who can
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help
them to soar higher.

In order to solve this problem, one of the possible solution is to practice public speaking.
For instance
, whether you work in IT, customer service, construction, or any
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other
industry, you will
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need
to be able to communicate
clearly
and
effectively
. This can
be achieved
by attending
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some
training and taking part in various conferences. Another
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fix
is
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good
active listening. While you
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need
to be able to express your
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own
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ideas
, you
also
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need
to
thoughtfully
listen to the
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ideas
of others. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
your client, employers and management feel respected and valued.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
issues with workers such as lack of confidence and networking
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skills
.
Therefore
, employers are finding difficulty in searching potential candidate with
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good
soft
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skills
. It can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
using proper guidance or techniques like improving speaking and being a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
listener.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government makes laws regarding nutritious food but other things that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibilities v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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