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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 4
Some people in the urban areas think that it is better to plant trees in the free spots rather than building homes. I think I strongly agree with this because it is crucial that trees have to be in the environment which will help us to have clean air and better atmosphere. Cleanliness of the air is one of the major issues that we are facing these days. It is well proven that trees are the main stream which provide oxygen that we breathe. Also, they help to control pollution for a certain level. For instance, the government of the UAE has controlled air pollution in the country by planting trees throughout the main streets. Therefore, it would be a good practice to give more importance to greens rather than houses in the open spaces in cities. Secondly, by this practice, population in cities can be reduced drastically. People prefer to live in major cities than rural areas. However, if the governing bodies have a control over the building of houses in these crowded areas could reduce these issues. A study by the Urban Population Council of the UAE, for example, shows that pollution is controlled and reduced dramatically by following strict instructions from the head of the department. Hence, everything in this place goes well at the moment. To conclude, citizens should develop a practice which is good for them as well as the society. By that way, a number of problems can be solved instantly without any regret.
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that it is better to plant
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trees
in the free spots
rather
than building homes. I
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think
I
strongly
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agree
with this
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because
it is crucial that
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trees
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have to
be in the environment which will
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help
us to have clean air and better atmosphere.

Cleanliness of the air is one of the major issues that we are facing these days. It is well proven that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
are the main stream which provide oxygen that we breathe.
Also
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to control pollution for a certain level.
For instance
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of the UAE has controlled air pollution in the country by planting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
throughout the main streets.
Therefore
, it would be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
practice to give more importance to greens
rather
than
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houses
in the open spaces in cities.

Secondly
, by this practice, population in cities can be
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reduced
drastically
.
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People
prefer to
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live
in major cities than rural areas.
However
, if the governing bodies have a control over the building of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
in these crowded areas could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
these issues. A study by the Urban Population Council of the UAE,
for example
,
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shows
that pollution
is controlled
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
dramatically
by following strict instructions from the head of the department.
Hence
, everything in this place goes well at the moment.

To conclude
, citizens should develop a practice which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for them
as well
as the society. By that way, a number of problems can
be solved
instantly
without any regret.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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