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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of the society. Others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 2

Some opine guardians should literate their offsprings about how to be an ideal citizen, whereas others think other places such as school, college and university are the perfect place to learn it. Although education plays a big role to become a good human by practicing discipline in the classroom and respecting teachers, I personally believe parents who make a nation proud by teaching their children about manners and mental development. On the one hand, youngsters learn about the timetables and how to obey the rules in their education. They receive these lessons from their teachers and older school mates which help them to become a good person in the future. For example, in the U. S. A there are some schools where ethical lessons are mandatory for a certain period of their student life. However, this is not true for all of the world, a few months ago, there was a killing in Bangladesh University of Engineering and Technology. In this incident all the students were mature and there was no regret while beating the victim. On the other hand, there are those who believe that family and friends are the principle educators. As Netaji Subhas Chanda Bosh says "Give me a literate mother, I will give a nation with prosperity". Parents play a key role in their offspring's development in the early childhood. A happy family produces a happy and healthy child. For instance, it has been found in many studies that children from a divorced family are more prone to involve in juvenile crime. On the contrary, youngsters become gracious, noble and honest when they grow up in a close-knit family. Moreover, it is very essential to develop a peaceful subconscious mind for the future and it is only possible from the relationship between father, mother and siblings. In conclusion, even though school, college and university provide lessons on how to be a law abiding individual for the community, it is the mother and father who teaches how to be a happy and good person life which help to build a peaceful society. It is predicted that in the future there will more family ties and people will learn how to be a better person for it.

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of the society. Others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some
opine guardians should literate their
offsprings
about how to be an ideal citizen, whereas others
think
other places such as school, college and university are the perfect place to learn it. Although education plays a
big
role to become a
good
human by practicing discipline in the classroom and respecting teachers, I
personally
believe parents who
make
a nation proud by teaching their children about manners and mental development. On the one hand, youngsters learn about the timetables and how to obey the
rules
in their education. They receive these lessons from their teachers and older school mates which
help
them to become a
good
person in the future.
For example
, in the U. S. A there are
some
schools where ethical lessons are mandatory for a certain period of their student life.
However
, this is not true for
all of the
world, a few months ago, there was a killing in Bangladesh University of Engineering and Technology. In this incident all the students were mature and there was no regret while beating the victim.
On the other hand
, there are those who believe that family and friends are the principle educators. As
Netaji
Subhas
Chanda
Bosh says
"
Give me a literate mother, I will give a nation with prosperity
"
. Parents play a key role in their offspring's development in the early childhood. A happy family produces a happy and healthy child.
For instance
, it has
been found
in
many
studies that children from a divorced family are more prone to involve in juvenile crime.
On the contrary
, youngsters become gracious, noble and honest when they grow up in a close-knit family.
Moreover
, it is
very
essential to develop a peaceful subconscious mind for the future and it is
only
possible from the relationship between father, mother and siblings.
In conclusion
,
even though
school, college and university provide lessons on how to be a
law abiding
individual for the community, it is the mother and father who teaches how to be a happy and
good
person life which
help
to build a peaceful society. It
is predicted
that in the future there will more family ties and
people
will learn how to be a better person for it.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
4 paragraphs
369 words
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