Wealth is considered by many people to be one of the most important contributing factors towards happiness. I completely disagree and believe that it is possible for people to be happy even if they have little money and other aspects of life play a vital role in creating happiness.
To begin with, money does not necessarily bring happiness. One way that people gain happiness is through their work. For instance, a doctor doing volunteer work in under developing counties may have very little money but the reward of helping people and doing the job they are good at, brings happiness in itself. In other words, happiness can be found by using skills that people are trained for and through job satisfaction.
Furthermore, money is one of the component elements of happiness but not the most significant one. Factors such as having supportive and loving people in one’s life plays an important part of happiness. While money may bring the opportunities to enjoy pleasure, few people would enjoy them on their own. Being surrounded by a loving and caring family is considered by most people to be more valuable than any amount of money. Therefore, spending money on an experience, such as family vacation or outings with social circles provides more happiness than spending money on possession.
In conclusion, it is commonly believed that money is influencing factor contributing towards happiness, however, I personally think that money is not an essential part of happiness, it can be found through strong family connection and job satisfaction. People were happy before money was invented, so happiness can exist without it.
Wealth
is considered
by
many
people
to be one of the most
important
contributing factors towards
happiness
. I completely disagree and believe that it is possible for
people
to be happy even if they have
little
money
and other aspects of life play a vital role in creating happiness.
To
begin
with,
money
does not
necessarily
bring
happiness
. One way that
people
gain
happiness
is through their work.
For instance
, a doctor doing volunteer work in under developing counties may have
very
little
money
but
the reward of helping
people
and doing the job they are
good
at, brings
happiness
in itself.
In other words
,
happiness
can
be found
by using
skills
that
people
are trained
for and through job satisfaction.
Furthermore
,
money
is one of the component elements of
happiness
but
not the most significant one. Factors such as having supportive and loving
people
in one’s life plays an
important
part of
happiness
. While
money
may bring the opportunities to enjoy pleasure, few
people
would enjoy them on their
own
.
Being surrounded
by a loving and caring family
is considered
by most
people
to be more valuable than any amount of
money
.
Therefore
, spending
money
on an experience, such as family vacation or outings with social circles provides more
happiness
than spending
money
on possession.
In conclusion
, it is
commonly
believed that
money
is influencing factor contributing towards
happiness
,
however
, I
personally
think
that
money
is not an essential part of
happiness
, it can
be found
through strong family connection and job satisfaction.
People
were happy
before
money
was invented
,
so
happiness
can exist without it.
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