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Some people believe that people should follow common manners of dining and greeting when following visiting foreign countries. Do you agree with this view. v.2

Some people believe that people should follow common manners of dining and greeting when following visiting foreign countries. Do you agree with this view. v. 2
A lion’s share of society thinks that individuals should follow good table manner while eating and meeting people particularly when exploring overseas nations, however the rest go averse it. I am completely accord with this above statement. The following paragraphs would highlight my personal perspective with an apt examples. To embark, I see eye to eye with the central idea for various reasons. First and foremost, good manners alway makes for good impression as culinary habits and cultures are different in each nations. Hence, it can be very helpful to know how people abroad expect them to behave in public and having basic understanding of culture and eating habits can help avoid awkward misunderstandings for people. To exemplify it, in many western countries people used fork and knife while dining-out while most South Asian continents people used traditional method of eating with their bare hands. Furthermore, while exploring overseas learning basic rules and gesture of that country does not take much efforts as implementing them in practice will rewarding as it touches every aspects of life. Consequently, one should respect culture and traditions of foreign nations in order to be accepted in too that environment and feel important part of it. For instance, in India younger one wait for older people to finish dinner before cleaning table just to show politeness toward seniors and feel proud of their rich culture and tradition. To sum up, while exploring foreign destinations, people should show some etiquette and table manners in order to be accepted as a part of their culture and traditions.
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thinks
that individuals should follow
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good
table manner while eating and meeting
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people
particularly
when exploring overseas nations,
however
the rest go averse it. I am completely accord with this above statement. The following paragraphs would highlight my personal perspective with an apt
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examples
.

To embark, I
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see
eye to eye with the central
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idea
for various reasons.
First
and foremost,
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good
manners
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alway
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makes
for
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good
impression as culinary habits and
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cultures
are
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different
in each
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nations
.
Hence
, it can be
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very
helpful to know how
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people
abroad
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expect
them to behave in public and having basic understanding of
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culture
and eating habits can
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help
avoid awkward misunderstandings for
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people
. To exemplify it, in
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many
western countries
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people
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used
fork and knife while dining-out while most South Asian continents
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people
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used
traditional method of eating with their bare hands.

Furthermore
, while exploring overseas learning basic
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rules
and gesture of that country does not take
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much
efforts as implementing them in practice will
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rewarding
as it touches every
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aspects
of life.
Consequently
, one should respect
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culture
and traditions of foreign nations in order to be
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accepted
in
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too that
environment and feel
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important
part of it.
For instance
, in India younger one wait for older
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people
to finish dinner
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before
cleaning table
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just
to
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show
politeness toward seniors and feel proud of their rich
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culture
and tradition.

To sum up, while exploring foreign destinations,
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people
should
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show
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some
etiquette and table manners in order to be
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accepted
as a part of their
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culture
and traditions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people believe that people should follow common manners of dining and greeting when following visiting foreign countries. Do you agree with this view. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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