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Some people think that nuclear is better than other source of power for meeting ever - increasing global needs. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Some people think that nuclear is better than other source of power for meeting ever - increasing global needs. v. 1
It is a prevalent belief that nuclear is more beneficial than other potential sources to meet the world's demands. From my perspective, although nuclear has been acknowledged as one of the most important energy sources, which can match the increasing demands, renewable resources might be a better option. To begin with, why I believe that nuclear is a good choice, the amount of potential that brought out from a nuclear plant is magnificently more than other options, such as water dams. What I mean by this is that the spirit comes from a nuclear power plant is ten times stronger than an average dam can produce. To further clarify this with an instance, I can state that Turkey has over than 70 dams, yet these are merely as powerful as seven nuclear plants and construction of seven nuclear plants could cost cheaper in the country. Therefore, nuclear strength would be a better alternative than dams. The second reason, why I claim the sunlight possibly a better option than nuclear, the star is a renewable efficiency source, which is not only harmless but also endless and more powerful. In other words, the efficiency is offered by the star is better than any other alternatives. To illustrate, the amount of sun lights that touch on the earth's surface for a minute is adequate to meet the whole world's two years of spirit sources. Therefore, as soon as technological advancements can use the sun effectively, humankind will not need another energy source anymore. To summarize, taking the better natural cause points into account, it can be concluded that although nuclear is a better choice than current other alternatives, the sunlight will be able to the best power expert in close future.
It is a prevalent belief that nuclear is more beneficial than
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other
potential
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sources
to
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meet
the world's demands. From my perspective, although nuclear has
been acknowledged
as one of the most
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important
energy
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sources
, which can match the increasing demands, renewable resources might be a
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better
option.

To
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begin
with, why I believe that nuclear is a
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good
choice, the amount of potential that brought out from a nuclear
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plant
is
magnificently
more than
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other
options, such as water dams. What I mean by this is that the spirit
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comes
from a nuclear power
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plant
is ten times stronger than an average dam can produce. To
further
clarify this with an instance, I can state that Turkey has
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over
than 70 dams,
yet
these are
merely
as powerful as seven nuclear
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plants
and construction of seven nuclear
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plants
could cost cheaper in the country.
Therefore
, nuclear strength would be a
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better
alternative than dams.

The second reason, why I claim the sunlight
possibly
a
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better
option than nuclear, the star is a renewable efficiency
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source
, which is not
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only
harmless
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but
also
endless and more powerful. In
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other
words, the efficiency
is offered
by the star is
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better
than any
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other
alternatives. To illustrate, the amount of sun lights that touch on the earth's surface for a minute is adequate to
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meet
the whole world's two years of spirit
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sources
.
Therefore
, as
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soon
as technological advancements can
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use
the sun
effectively
, humankind will not need another energy
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source
anymore.

To summarize
, taking the
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better
natural cause points into account, it can
be concluded
that although nuclear is a
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better
choice than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
alternatives, the sunlight will be able to the best power expert in close future.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that nuclear is better than other source of power for meeting ever - increasing global needs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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