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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.29

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 29
Due to the globalized world, people were certainly using a various mode of transportation. Some people perceive that the authority should have to use money on the railways not in a construction of a road. I strongly support this view as this mode provides a way of communication in a cost-effective manner. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, there are many parameters due that people prefer to use this service. The predominant reason is that this form of commute delivers the conveyance and economical service to the passengers. Although, this type of communication can be possible to cover the long and short distance, having a large capacity to cover several people at a one time. Moreover, in the fast-growing world, the availability of such transform can be used by many people to reach their working place which situated number of kilometres far away from their home. This will help such an individual to acquire the opportunity and try to manage their families at the same time. For example, there are many trains available which takes a passenger from a nearby village and delivers to them to the metropolis where they can do the work and earn the money. Furthermore, as the regime uses this money for the expansion of this service will provide manifold benefits to the general public. This will create a new employment opportunity where people can find the new work and earn a wealth. At last, the pollution generated by this way would be considered as less compare to the road vehicles where every person can use their vehicles to reach their destination. This will also help to decline, the number of road vehicles. For instance, Mumbai, where the people have to travel a large kilometre, so most of them were using this mode, as this will provide comfort and large availability of trains from one station to another. In conclusion, train is a more comfortable form of communication through which layman can travel a variety of a distance. Even by employing more money in this they can start new services to cover a rural region. These services deliver many benefits to an individual and reduce the pollution as well.
Due to the globalized world,
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people
were
certainly
using a various mode of transportation.
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Some
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people
perceive that the authority should
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have to
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use
money on the railways not in a construction of a road. I
strongly
support this view as this mode provides a way of communication
Consider replacing "in a cost-effective manner" with the adverb for "cost-effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a cost-effective manner
. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there are
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many
parameters due that
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people
prefer to
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use
this
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service
. The predominant reason is that this form of commute delivers the conveyance and economical
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service
to the passengers. Although, this type of communication can be possible to cover the long and short distance, having a large capacity to cover several
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people
at a one time.
Moreover
, in the
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fast
-growing world, the availability of such transform can be
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used
by
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many
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people
to reach their working place which situated number of
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kilometres
far away from their home. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
such an individual to acquire the opportunity and try to manage their families at the same time.
For example
, there are
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many
trains available which takes a passenger from a nearby village and delivers to them to the metropolis where they can do the work and earn the money.

Furthermore
, as the regime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
this money for the expansion of this
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service
will provide manifold benefits to the
Consider using "public".
general public
. This will create a new employment opportunity where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can find the new work and earn a wealth. At last, the pollution generated by this way would
be considered
as less compare to the road vehicles where every person can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their vehicles to reach their destination. This will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to decline, the number of road vehicles.
For instance
, Mumbai, where the
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people
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have to
travel a large
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kilometre
,
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so
most of them were using this mode, as this will provide comfort and large availability of trains from one station to another.

In conclusion
, train is a more comfortable form of communication through which layman can travel a variety of a distance. Even by employing more money in this they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
to cover a rural region. These
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services
deliver
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many
benefits to an individual and
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reduce
the pollution
as well
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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