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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. v. 2
It is true for many people that reading news in newspapers is the most effective method to learn about current and international events as well as broaden their horizon, while others claim that getting news via media, radio and the internet is the best option. From my point of view, although reading news from the newspaper is the great way to obtain information, I would argue that using other types of media is preferable. On the one hand, reading news in newspapers has a range of benefits. Firstly, information in the newspapers is usually close to reality and subject to better editorial control than news from other types of media. Moreover, readers get detailed information about the matter without any fake data. For instance, the percentage of newspaper reader has been increasing in comparison to the different modes of news available. Additionally, newspaper reporters and writers are professionally trained, so that they can cover an impartial perspective which gives the reader more balanced view. On the other hand, other types of news media such as radio, internet and TV can be a great mode of information. Nowadays, people are busy in their life and work, radio is the most convenient news provider to them when they commute to and from home. Furthermore, disabled persons who cannot see and hear easily, will be able to listen and see news from the TV news. For example, young people feel more comfortable in hearing news about the electronic gadgets. Thus, development of the internet has increased the usage of radio and other media rather than newspaper. In conclusion, despite the fact that reading news in newspapers might have advantages, I believe that other types of media like TV, radio, and the internet is a better way to access news.
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is the most effective method to learn about
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as well
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,
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and the internet is the best option. From my point of view, although
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from the
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is the great way to obtain
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information
, I would argue that using
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types
of
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is preferable.

On the one hand,
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reading
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news
in
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newspapers
has a range of benefits.
Firstly
,
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information
in the
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newspapers
is
usually
close to reality and subject to better editorial control than
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news
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other
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types
of
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media
.
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, readers
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detailed
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about the matter without any fake data.
For instance
, the percentage of
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newspaper
reader has been increasing
in comparison
to the
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different
modes of
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available.
Additionally
,
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newspaper
reporters and writers are
professionally
trained,
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that they can cover an impartial perspective which gives the reader more balanced view.

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hand,
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, internet and TV can be a great mode of
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. Nowadays,
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people
are busy in their life and work,
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is the most convenient
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provider to them when they commute to and from home.
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, disabled persons who cannot
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see
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easily
, will be able to listen and
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from the TV
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.
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, young
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people
feel more comfortable in hearing
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about the electronic gadgets.
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and
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media
rather
than newspaper.

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, despite the fact that
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in
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might have advantages, I believe that
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types
of
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like TV,
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, and the internet is a better way to access
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.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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