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It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. This essay agrees that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food companies. Firstly, this v.1

It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. This essay agrees that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food companies. Firstly, this v. 1
What benefits us more? More or fewer choices? Although certain people believe that more choice is always better, others support this idea that picking one thing from dozens of options can take over and cause choice overload. I completely agree with the latter group and I think that having a lot of options makes decision making super complicated and may lead to dissatisfaction and waste of time. One of the serious problems that having too many choices causes is the dissatisfaction. When people face a huge number of options, it would be possible to be confused and mislead, because they look for the best option. As more choices are available the challenge of making the decision becomes more difficult and this idea comes to the mind that you could have a better choice. So people feel less satisfied with their decision and it may look unappealing to them. In addition, too much choice has a cost which is a waste of valuable time. When there are lots of alternatives to consider, people spend more hours in the markets to find the perfect one. In some occasions It takes a long time to make decisions that have no meaningful impacts on their life, that is taken away from other works which could be done. In conclusion, according to a group of people the availability of a huge number of options would mislead us. I agree with this opinion and I certainly believe that having too many choices could be overwhelming. It brings about a waste of precious time and dissatisfaction.
What benefits us more? More or fewer
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choices
? Although certain
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people
believe that more
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choice
is always better, others support this
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idea
that picking one thing from dozens of
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options
can take over and cause
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choice
overload. I completely
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agree
with the latter group and I
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think
that having
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a lot of
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options
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
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decision making
super complicated and may lead to dissatisfaction and waste of time.

One of the serious problems that having too
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many
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choices
causes is the dissatisfaction. When
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people
face a huge number of
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options
, it would be possible to
be confused
and mislead,
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because
they look for the best
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option
. As more
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choices
are available the challenge of making the
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decision
becomes more difficult and this
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idea
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comes
to the mind that you could have a better
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choice
.
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So
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people
feel less satisfied with their
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decision
and it may look unappealing to them.

In addition
, too much
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choice
has a cost which is a waste of valuable time. When there are lots of alternatives to consider,
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people
spend more hours in the markets to find the perfect one. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
occasions It takes a long time to
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make
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decisions
that have no meaningful impacts on their life, that
is taken
away from other works which could
be done
.

In conclusion
, according to a group of
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people
the availability of a huge number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
would mislead us. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this opinion and I
certainly
believe that having too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
could be overwhelming. It brings about a waste of precious time and dissatisfaction.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. This essay agrees that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food companies. Firstly, this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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