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Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 3
Few men and women deem that information can be best received and learnt through newspapers whereas some argue that the Internet is a better medium compare to newspapers. Although, traditional way has some merits, I believe that utilization of cyberspace is good compare to tabloids and this essay will discuss both the arguments. To commence with, the price of newspapers are kept low that everyone can afford it esspecially poor people and on top of that it is printed in local languages. So, everyone can read it easily. Moreover, newspapers are easily accessible medium to get because it is not only available in cities but also in rural areas. Additionally, every field is included in newspapers that it can be fathomed without searching specific information like the Internet. However, sometimes it displays only negative things as well as spread wrong news. For example, a famous newspaper ' Gujarat Samachar' always speaks against the Prime Minister of India. Furthermore, people will not have to wait for the next day to get updated with surroundings esspecially on national holidays. Hence, I believe that Internet is better source of information. On the contrary, there are plethora of reasons to support the Internet to get familiriazed. Firstly, people can get updated news as per their convenient time as it is a faster mode than newspapers. Secondly, if people have Internet connection then they can surf need without paying extra money. Thirdly, videos and better description make news easily understandable than conventional way. To illustrate, people will better know the news about surgical strike by India, if it will be presented in video format. Despite of having numerous benefits, the price of the Internet are too exorbitant to get connected with it. In addition to that, it is still a matter of question about accesibility of Internet in rural areas. Though, I believe that it is the best way to get information. In conclusion, agglomerating all the above mentioned points, however, newspapers have ample of advantages, I believe that preference should be given to the Internet and it is recommended that people should be inclined more towards hyperspace.
Few
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men
and women deem that information can be best received and
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learnt
through
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newspapers
whereas
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some
argue that the Internet is a
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better
medium compare to
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newspapers
. Although, traditional way has
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some
merits, I
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believe
that utilization of cyberspace is
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good
compare to tabloids and this essay will discuss both the arguments.

To commence with, the price of
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newspapers
are
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kept
low that everyone can afford it
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esspecially
poor
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people
and
on top of that
it
is printed
in local languages.
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So
, everyone can read it
easily
.
Moreover
,
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newspapers
are
easily
accessible medium to
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get
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because
it is not
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only
available in cities
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but
also
in rural areas.
Additionally
, every field
is included
in
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newspapers
that it can
be fathomed
without searching specific information like the Internet.
However
,
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sometimes
it displays
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only
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negative
things
as well
as spread
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wrong
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news
.
For example
, a
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famous
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newspaper
' Gujarat
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Samachar&
#039; always speaks against the Prime Minister of India.
Furthermore
,
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people
will not
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have to
wait for the
next
day to
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get
updated with surroundings
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esspecially
on national holidays.
Hence
, I
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believe
that Internet is
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better
source of information.

On the contrary
, there are plethora of reasons to support the Internet to
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get
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familiriazed
.
Firstly
,
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people
can
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get
updated
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news
as per their convenient time as it is a faster mode than
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newspapers
.
Secondly
, if
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people
have Internet connection then they can surf need without paying extra money.
Thirdly
, videos and
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better
description
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make
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news
easily
understandable than conventional way. To illustrate,
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people
will
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better
know the
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news
about surgical strike by India, if it will
be presented
in video format.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
having numerous benefits, the price of the Internet are too exorbitant to
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get
connected with it.
In addition
to that, it is
still
a matter of question about
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accesibility
of Internet in rural areas.
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Though
, I
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believe
that it is the best way to
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get
information.

In conclusion
, agglomerating all the above mentioned points,
however
,
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newspapers
have ample of advantages, I
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believe
that preference should be
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given
to the Internet and it
is recommended
that
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people
should
be inclined
more towards hyperspace.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6.0
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