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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 4
Every crime requires a precise punishment to increase the faith of people in the judiciary. Some feel that fixed punishment for each crime is necessary. While others argue that it is not fair since each crime has different motive. In my opinion, I think that the circumstances and motive of a crime should also be taken into account while deciding a punishment. In the first case, if an accused has committed the crime then a fixed punishment will help to reduce the number of trials in the court and hence make it a fast procedure. Usually a long court procedure will affect the victim or victim’s family in a bad way and reduce their hope in the judicial system. But a fixed punishment will make people aware of each punishment for a certain crime which will reduce the crime rate. For example in some Arab countries the punishment for murder is death penalty and the crime rate is evidently low compared to other countries. On the other hand, considering the circumstance and the motive of the crime will have a choice to reduce or increase the amount of punishment. For example, if someone committed a murder for self protection it is a totally different case of murder. So having the same punishment for murder wont be necessary. But if someone did a murder in a brutal way, the punishment should vary. Human rights of the accused is also considered in this type of judgement. To conclude, I think it is necessary to consider the circumstances and the motives for deciding the punishment of a crime.
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requires a precise
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to increase the faith of
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people
in the judiciary.
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feel that
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fixed
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for each
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crime
is necessary. While others argue that it is not
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fair
since each
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crime
has
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different
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motive
. In my opinion, I
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think
that the circumstances and
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motive
of a
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crime
should
also
be taken
into account while deciding a punishment.

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first
case, if an accused has committed the
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crime
then a
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fixed
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punishment
will
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help
to
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reduce
the number of trials in the court and
hence
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make
it a
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fast
procedure.
Usually
a long court procedure will affect the victim or victim’s family in a
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bad
way and
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reduce
their hope in the judicial system.
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But
a
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fixed
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punishment
will
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make
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people
aware of each
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punishment
for a certain
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crime
which will
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reduce
the
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crime
rate.
For example
in
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some
Arab countries the
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punishment
for
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murder
is death penalty and the
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crime
rate is
evidently
low compared to other countries.

On the other hand
, considering the circumstance and the
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motive
of the
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crime
will have a choice to
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reduce
or increase the amount of
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punishment
.
For example
, if someone committed a
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murder
for
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self protection
it is a
totally
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different
case of
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murder
.
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So
having the same
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punishment
for
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murder
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wont
be necessary.
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But
if someone did a
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murder
Consider replacing "in a brutal way" with the adverb for "brutal"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a brutal way
, the
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punishment
should vary. Human rights of the accused is
also
considered in this type of judgement.

To conclude
, I
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think
it is necessary to consider the circumstances and the
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motives
for deciding the
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punishment
of a
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crime
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

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