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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. v. 5
People have different views about the purpose of museums in modern society. While it' s true that museum - as tourist attractions - should be fascinating, I stand by the idea that the main role of museum is to give knowledge of cultural, religious and historical importance. On the one hand, it can be argued that museums should be entertaining and more attractive to the public. Museums are widely considered as important tourist attractions of any cities or countries. However, there' s a common belief that they are too elitist, uninspiring and only encourage educated people to visit. By adding more entertainment values, museums can appeal to a broader audience. Nowadays, there is also a wide range of museums of which not all are about academic subjects. It is not difficult to find a light-hearted and humourous museum in the world such as chocolate museum in Belgium, kimchi museum in Korea or museum for the heartbreaks in Italy. On the other hand, I strongly believe that the main purpose of museums is to educate people. They exhibit collections of interesting objects that hold great cultural or historical values. The aim of any exhibitions is to teach visitors things that they haven' t known. To achieve that, museums usually offer free guided tours with professional guides, or give away brochures, guidebooks, audio tapes that contain detailed information about the exhibitions. By doing that, museums should play an important role in teaching people about history, culture, science and many other aspects of life. In conclusion, I think museums, as educational institutions, should offer educative, interesting and enjoyable experiences to visitors.
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should be fascinating, I stand by the
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that the main role of
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is to give knowledge of cultural, religious and historical importance.

On the one hand, it can
be argued
that
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museums
should be entertaining and more attractive to the public.
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are
widely
considered as
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important
tourist attractions of any cities or countries.
However
,
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#039; s a common belief that they are too elitist, uninspiring and
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only
encourage educated
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people
to visit. By adding more entertainment values,
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museums
can appeal to a broader audience. Nowadays, there is
also
a wide range of
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museums
of which not all are about academic subjects. It is not difficult to find a light-hearted and
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humourous
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museum
in the world such as chocolate
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in Belgium, kimchi
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museum
in Korea or
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for the heartbreaks in Italy.

On the other hand
, I
strongly
believe that the main purpose of
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museums
is to educate
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people
. They exhibit collections of interesting objects that hold great cultural or historical values. The aim of any exhibitions is to teach visitors things that they
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haven&
#039; t known. To achieve that,
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museums
usually
offer free guided tours with professional guides, or give away brochures, guidebooks, audio tapes that contain detailed information about the exhibitions. By doing that,
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museums
should play an
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important
role in teaching
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people
about history, culture, science and
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many
other aspects of life.

In conclusion
, I
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think
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museums
, as educational institutions, should offer educative, interesting and enjoyable experiences to visitors.
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IELTS essay Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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