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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion. v.1

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. v. 1
People have different views about the role and function of museums. In my opinion, museums can and should be both entertaining and educational. On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to entertain. Museums are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit a collection of interesting objects that many people will want to see. The average visitor may become bored if he or she has to read or listen to too much educational content, so museums often put more of an emphasis on enjoyment rather than learning. This type of museum is designed to be visually spectacular, and may have interactive activities or even games as part of its exhibitions. On the other hand, some people argue that museums should focus on education. The aim of any exhibition should be to teach visitors something that they did not previously know. Usually this means that the history behind the museum’s exhibits needs to be explained, and this can be done in various ways. Some museums employ professional guides to talk to their visitors, while other museums offer headsets so that visitors can listen to detailed commentary about the exhibition. In this way, museums can play an important role in teaching people about history, culture, science and many other aspects of life. In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to offer an interesting, enjoyable and educational experience so that people can have fun and learn something at the same time.
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. In my opinion,
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can and should be both entertaining and educational.

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museum
is to entertain.
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Museums
are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit a collection of interesting objects that
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people
will want to
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. The average
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visitor
may become bored if he or she
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read or listen to too much educational content,
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museums
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often
put more of an emphasis on enjoyment
rather
than learning. This type of
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museum
is designed
to be
visually
spectacular, and may have interactive activities or even games as part of its exhibitions.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
argue that
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museums
should focus on education. The aim of any exhibition should be to teach
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visitors
something that they did not previously know.
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museum’s
exhibits needs to be
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explained
, and this can
be done
in various ways.
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museums
employ professional guides to talk to their
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visitors
, while other
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museums
offer headsets
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so
that
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visitors
can listen to detailed commentary about the exhibition. In this way,
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museums
can play an
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important
role in teaching
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people
about history, culture, science and
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many
other aspects of life.

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, it seems to me that a
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good
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should be able to offer an interesting, enjoyable and educational experience
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that
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people
can have fun and learn something at the same time.
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IELTS essay Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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