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some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion? v. 2
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that an increasing number of people consider that local profession galleries and museums should be focused on containing the national craft heritage of a bucolic rather than keeping foreign profession works of other countries. Personally, I tend to consider that this point of view is well grounded, however we should not ignore the fact that profession works of other countries can provide the atmosphere of that bucolic. First and foremost, it is well known that every gallery has a various kind of local craft works and also foreign works. One of the main reasons behind that the local art works illustrate the history of country. Correspondingly, foreign art works personify the history of other parts of the world at the same time. A good case in point is the museum of “Kuns camera” is well known not only for keeping the national art works, but also this building is provided with the profession works of other counties such as pictures of Leonardo da Vinci and so on. On the other hand, it can also be argued that some people are passionate about exploring only the history of their country. That is to say they are fascinated by their own past rather than being really into other countries’ craft works. Taking the museum of Tamerlan as an example, this gallery illustrates only the history of Uzbekistan and the history of great warlord Tamerlan. Overall, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis, we can come to a conclusion that although museums keep all the craft works of the country, we should not neglect the works of other counties, which can provide the atmosphere of the culture of the past.
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widely
discussed issues nowadays is that an increasing number of
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people
consider that local
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profession
galleries and
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museums
should
be focused
on containing the national
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craft
heritage of a bucolic
rather
than keeping foreign
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profession
works of
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other
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countries
.
Personally
, I tend to consider that this point of view is well grounded,
however
we should not
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ignore
the fact that
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profession
works of
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other
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countries
can provide the atmosphere of that bucolic.

First
and foremost, it is well known that every gallery has a various kind of local
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craft
works and
also
foreign works. One of the main reasons behind that the local art works illustrate the
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history
of
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country
.
Correspondingly
, foreign art works personify the
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history
of
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other
parts of the world at the same time. A
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good
case in point is the
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museum
of “
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Kuns
camera” is well known not
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only
for keeping the national art works,
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but
also
this building
is provided
with the
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profession
works of
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other
counties such as pictures of Leonardo da Vinci and
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so
on.

On the
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hand, it can
also
be argued
that
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some
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people
are passionate about exploring
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only
the
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history
of their
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country
.
That is
to say they
are fascinated
by their
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own
past
rather
than being
really
into
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other
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countries’
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craft
works. Taking the
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museum
of
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Tamerlan
as an example, this gallery illustrates
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only
the
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history
of Uzbekistan and the
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history
of great warlord
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Tamerlan
.

Overall
, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis, we can
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come
to a conclusion that although
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museums
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keep
all the
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craft
works of the
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country
, we should not neglect the works of
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other
counties, which can provide the atmosphere of the culture of the past.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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