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Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. v.3

Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. v. 3
People have different opinions about leadership in a corporation or government institution. A group of people believe that managerial and similar high-level positions should only be occupied by men, while others think that women could also be  good leaders. The following essay will discuss both views, but I personally believe that competency is the most important aspect in term of leadership. For a number of reasons, many people believe that men should be the leaders in companies or government bodies. Firstly, based on the psychological approach, men use ratio when they make decisions. Therefore they decisions would be more logical and reasonable. Secondly, men are the better decision makers when they have to make a sudden or urgent choice. Again certain jobs demand responsibilities that could be better performed by man than women. On the other hand, another group of people believe that women should also be given the chance to occupy important positions in a company. They believe that leaders should not be elected based on genders, but based on their competency. They also believe that leader is not purely a natural gift, as leadership could also be learned. Some of the examples would be Margaret Thatcher who successfully led England in the eighties and Hillary Clinton who became one of the ministers in the USA and now running for the presidential election.   These women have shown that they have all the competencies of becoming a good leader. In conclusion, some people still believe that gender would have a significant effect on leadership, but I disagree with the statement.   I personally believe that competency and experience of the individual, be it a man of woman is the most important aspect of choosing a leader in an organisation.
People
have
different
opinions about leadership in a corporation or
government
institution. A group of
people
believe
that managerial and similar high-level positions should
only
be occupied
by
men
, while others
think
that women could
also
be
 
good
leaders
. The following essay will discuss both views,
but
I
personally
believe
that
competency
is the most
important
aspect in term of leadership.

For a number of reasons,
many
people
believe
that
men
should be the
leaders
in
companies
or
government
bodies.
Firstly
, based on the psychological approach,
men
use
ratio when they
make
decisions.
Therefore
they
decisions
would be more logical and reasonable.
Secondly
,
men
are the better decision makers when they
have to
make
a sudden or urgent choice. Again certain jobs demand responsibilities that could be better performed by
man
than women.

On the other hand
, another group of
people
believe
that women should
also
be
given
the chance to occupy
important
positions in a
company
. They
believe
that
leaders
should not
be elected
based on genders,
but
based on their
competency
. They
also
believe
that
leader
is not
purely
a natural gift, as leadership could
also
be learned
.
Some of the
examples would be Margaret Thatcher who
successfully
led England in the eighties and Hillary Clinton who became one of the ministers in the USA and
now
running for the presidential election.
 
These women have shown that they have all the
competencies
of becoming a
good
leader.

In conclusion
,
some
people
still
believe
that gender would have a significant effect on leadership,
but
I disagree with the statement.
 
I
personally
believe
that
competency
and experience of the individual, be it a
man
of woman is the most
important
aspect of choosing a
leader
in an
organisation
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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