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Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. v. 1
These days, males and females are working parallel, however earlier, it was assumed that men have to lead, but nowadays, the trend has changed, and it has become a debatable question whether men are better managers or women. In this essay, both aspects will be discussed and a plausible conclusion will be extracted. While comparing genders for a managerial role, women's capability to organise everything can not be overlooked, they are specifically famous to be more particular about the minor detailing, aesthetic sense, presentation and accomplishing tasks before time even. Research shows that the presence of a female manager makes the office environment more formal, reliable and task achievable, not only they know the art to entangle customers but also employees. However, on the other hand, we find most of the organizations keep male supervisors as others believe that they keep a broader view of the market yet more approachable at any time, including; weekends and midnight. Moreover, frequent travelling out of station or late sittings to make a deal is comparatively more feasible to them as they are not considered to be mainly responsible for home chores. For instance; a male boss can stay in office as long as needed but contrary, for female it's rather difficult. Furthermore, In most of the societies, people feel more comfortable in the presence of a male, they feel free and be real, while it is nearly impossible in the presence of the opposite gender. For example, one can smoke, use inappropriate words or slangs or even share a drink with male bosses but it is nearly impossible with female supervisors. Thus, a level of discomfort rises and leads to dissatisfaction and failures. To sum up, people are divided and have diversified opinions, while I believe, having a male boss is far better in comparison, as he has wider market exposure and more time to dedicate to the serving organization. Thus, one should have a leading role of men in order to bring more successes.
These days,
males
and
females
are working parallel,
however
earlier, it
was assumed
that
men
have to
lead,
but
nowadays, the trend has
changed
, and it has become a debatable question whether
men
are better managers or women. In this essay, both aspects will
be discussed
and a plausible conclusion will
be extracted
.

While comparing genders for a managerial role, women's capability to
organise
everything can not
be overlooked
, they are
specifically
famous
to be more particular about the minor detailing, aesthetic sense, presentation and accomplishing tasks
before
time even. Research
shows
that the presence of a
female
manager
makes
the office environment more formal, reliable and task achievable, not
only
they know the art to entangle customers
but
also
employees.

However
,
on the other hand
, we find most of the organizations
keep
male supervisors as others believe that they
keep
a broader view of the market
yet
more approachable at any time, including; weekends and midnight.
Moreover
, frequent travelling out of station or late sittings to
make
a deal is
comparatively
more feasible to them as they are not considered to be
mainly
responsible for home chores.
For instance
; a male boss can stay in office as long as needed
but
contrary, for
female
it's
rather
difficult.

Furthermore
, In most of the societies,
people
feel more comfortable in the presence of a male, they feel free and be real, while it is
nearly
impossible in the presence of the opposite gender.
For example
, one can smoke,
use
inappropriate words or
slangs
or even share a drink with male bosses
but
it is
nearly
impossible with
female
supervisors.
Thus
, a level of discomfort rises and leads to dissatisfaction and failures.

To sum up,
people
are divided
and have diversified opinions, while I believe, having a male boss is far better
in comparison
, as he has wider market exposure and more time to dedicate to the serving organization.
Thus
, one should have a leading role of
men
in order to bring more successes.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
332 words
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