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some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience discuss both views and write your opinion. v.3

some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience v. 3
Without a doubt it is imperative to have favourable leaders amongst us in society today. Some would say leadership qualities are ingrained from birth, but on the other hand, it can be said that these are qualities you learn through life experiences and being around good leaders. I strongly believe that it is a learnt skill that is adapted over time with the proper training and ambition. In this essay I will examine both views and explain my support for the latter view. Firstly, It can be said that a person is born with leadership qualities because they have exhibited these characteristics. They can be described as one who is honest, confident an trustworthy. For example, a child at a young age who can defend themselves, be outspoken and take charge would be considered a leader. Consequently, it is natural for persons to assume that a child would grow up to be a good leader if they exhibits these characteristics at an early age. On the other hand, a person can gain these same qualities over the years through training and self help. Furthermore, there are many institutions available to the public that offer programs, such as public speaking and avenues to take to overcome shyness. A person who lacks these qualities can go to gain the confidence to do partake in these activities and become better leaders. For instance, some of our influential people came from humble beginnings to become inspirational leaders, albeit the hardship and problems they have been through. As a result, they have grown to want to protect others from said negativity and displayed leadership qualities. In conclusion, in order to become commander it is vital to possess certain qualities for the job and they should be exemplified daily. Although, many individuals believe that these traits are inherited from birth, conversely, others believe it can be gained through different avenues and experiences. I would tend to agree with the latter view, I believe our experiences nurture us to be who we are and good leaders gain these qualities through experience and training.
Without a doubt it is imperative to have
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favourable
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leaders
amongst us in society
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today
.
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Some
would say leadership
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qualities
are ingrained
from birth,
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but
on the
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other
hand, it can
be said
that these are
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qualities
you learn
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through
life
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experiences
and being around
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good
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leaders
. I
strongly
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believe
that it is a
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learnt
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skill
that
is adapted
over time with the proper training and ambition. In this essay I will examine both views and
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explain
my support for the latter view.

Firstly
, It can
be said
that a
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person
is born
with leadership
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qualities
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because
they have exhibited these characteristics. They can be
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described
as one
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who
is honest, confident
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an trustworthy
.
For example
, a child at a young age
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who
can defend themselves, be outspoken and take charge would
be considered
a
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leader
.
Consequently
, it is natural for
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persons
to assume that a child would grow up to be a
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good
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leader
if they
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exhibits
these characteristics at an early age.

On the
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other
hand, a
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person
can gain these same
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qualities
over the years
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through
training and self
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help
.
Furthermore
, there are
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many
institutions available to the public that offer programs, such as public speaking and avenues to take to overcome shyness. A
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person
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who
lacks these
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qualities
can go to gain the confidence to do partake in these activities and become better
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leaders
.
For instance
,
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some
of our influential
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people
came from humble beginnings to become inspirational
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leaders
, albeit the hardship and problems they have been
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through
.
As a result
, they have grown to want to protect others from said negativity and displayed leadership qualities.

In conclusion
, in order to become commander it is vital to possess certain
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qualities
for the
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job and
they should
be exemplified
daily. Although,
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many
individuals
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believe
that these traits
are inherited
from birth,
conversely
, others
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believe
it can
be gained
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through
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different
avenues and
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experiences
. I would tend to
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agree
with the latter view, I
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believe
our
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experiences
nurture us to be
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who
we are and
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good
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leaders
gain these
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qualities
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through
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experience
and training.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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