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some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience discuss both views and write your opinion. v.2

some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience v. 2
It is clear that a good leader is prerequisite for the success and effective operation of any team or any organisation. Although there are someone who state that leadership is an inborn talent, others believe an excellent leader can obtain all skills through social interaction. In my point of view, I reckon that the abilities of a great leader are generated partly through innate skills, yet mostly through learning. This essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, some people argue that leaders are born with special traits that distinguish them from others. Such characteristics make them easily understand the needs of team and have proper behaviours to obtain the support from partners. Many children actually appear to have the qualities of leadership in very young age, which may be inherited from parents or relatives. For example, nowadays it is not unusual to identify some good leaders in the high schools, who would later play important roles in their companies or even nations. However, inborn skills clearly are not enough to make an excellent leader. On the other hand, the statement that ‘leaders are made’ is advocated by many debaters who strongly believe that leadership can be acquired through experiences during one’s lifetime. Qualities associated with leadership are said to be the related to personality, social impact, inspiration, and enthusiasm. Moreover, the abilities must be attained through the process of learning, observing, and practising regularly. With such accumulated background coupled with some innate skills, the leaders would handily inspire other members and guide them to achieve the general goals. Take president Ho Chi Minh of Vietnam as an example. After discovering and learning many new conceptions from many countries, he came back and led Vietnamese to fight against the enemies for national independence successfully. In conclusion, it is obvious that some qualities of leadership can be somewhat acquired as innate talent. However, the majority skills are the results of training and effort. Therefore, people should study, observe, and practise frequently to improve their abilities which would form outstanding leaders.
It is
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clear
that a
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good
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leader
is prerequisite for the success and effective operation of any team or any
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organisation
. Although there are someone who state that
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leadership
is an inborn talent, others believe an excellent
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leader
can obtain all
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skills
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through
social interaction. In my point of view, I reckon that the abilities of a great
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leader
are generated
partly
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through
innate
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skills
,
yet
mostly
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through
learning. This essay will discuss both points of view.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
argue that
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leaders
are born
with special traits that distinguish them from others. Such characteristics
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make
them
easily
understand the needs of team and have proper
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behaviours
to obtain the support from partners.
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Many
children actually appear to have the qualities of
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leadership
in
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very
young age, which may
be inherited
from parents or relatives.
For example
, nowadays it is not unusual to identify
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some
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good
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leaders
in the high schools, who would later play
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important
roles in their
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companies
or even nations.
However
, inborn
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skills
clearly
are not
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enough
to
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make
an excellent leader.

On the
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other
hand, the statement that
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‘leaders
are made
’
is advocated
by
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many
debaters who
strongly
believe that
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leadership
can
be acquired
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through
experiences during one’s lifetime. Qualities associated with
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leadership
are said
to be the related to personality, social impact, inspiration, and enthusiasm.
Moreover
, the abilities
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must
be attained
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through
the process of learning, observing, and
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practising
regularly
. With such accumulated background coupled with
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some
innate
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skills
, the
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leaders
would
handily
inspire
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other
members and guide them to achieve the general goals. Take president Ho Chi Minh of Vietnam as an example. After discovering and learning
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many
new conceptions from
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many
countries, he came back and led Vietnamese to fight against the enemies for national independence
successfully
.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that
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some
qualities of
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leadership
can be somewhat acquired as innate talent.
However
, the majority
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skills
are the results of training and effort.
Therefore
,
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people
should study, observe, and
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practise
frequently
to
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improve
their abilities which would form outstanding
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leaders
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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