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Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. v. 1
Education plays an important role in everyone’s life. Some countries have single-sex schools while others have both single-sex and co-educational schools. In my opinion, it is up to the parents to decide which model is ideal for their children. It is believed that there is less room for distraction in single-sex schools. As a result, students focus on their studies with all their attention. Gender based prejudices do not exist in single sex schools and students can pursue whatever subject they like without any inhibitions. For example, girls in single sex schools tend to pursue science at a higher level. Similarly, boys at single-sex schools are more likely to take cookery classes or learn a language, despite the fact that these are often thought of as traditional subjects for girls. On the other hand, mixed schools prepare their students for future life where both genders need to co-exist, be it at home, university or office. Boys and girls learn to live and work together from a younger age and are emotionally mature in their relations with their opposite sex. They also happen to learn from each other and may pick up some new skills or traits. Developing mutual respect for one another is another positive. They are also sensitive in their dealings with members of the opposite sex. I think that both models of schooling have their merits and demerits. It depends on the institute and how well a child adapts to his or her surroundings. Parents play the most crucial role here because ultimately it is their decision.
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role in everyone’s life.
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Some
countries have single-sex
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schools
while others have both single-sex and co-educational
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schools
. In my opinion, it is up to the parents to decide which model is ideal for their children.

It
is believed
that there is less room for distraction in single-sex
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schools
.
As a result
, students focus on their studies with all their attention. Gender based prejudices do not exist in single sex
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schools
and students can pursue whatever subject they like without any inhibitions.
For example
, girls in single sex
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schools
tend to pursue science at a higher level.
Similarly
, boys at single-sex
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schools
are more likely to take cookery classes or learn a language, despite the fact that these are
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often
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thought
of as traditional subjects for girls.

On the other hand
, mixed
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schools
prepare their students for future life where both genders need to co-exist, be it at home, university or office. Boys and girls learn to
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live
and work together from a younger age and are
emotionally
mature in their relations with their opposite sex. They
also
happen to learn from each other and may pick up
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some
new
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skills
or traits. Developing mutual respect for one another is another
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positive
. They are
also
sensitive in their dealings with members of the opposite sex.

I
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think
that both models of schooling have their merits and demerits. It depends on the institute and how well a child adapts to
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his or her
surroundings. Parents play the most crucial role here
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because
ultimately
it is their decision.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. v. 1

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