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Some people think that killing animals for food is cruel, but others claim that animals are a necessary part of a diet. What is your opinion. v.1

Some people think that killing animals for food is cruel, but others claim that animals are a necessary part of a diet. What is your opinion. v. 1
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or written? Is the booth
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popular proverb represents the power of the
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image
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communication
.
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communication
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images
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also
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in the dissemination of
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ideas
? !
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,
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of sick lungs
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on cigarette boxes to
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possible consequences of smoking.
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, statistics
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show
a slight reduction in the number of smokers, indicating that they perceive the effects of
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negative
habit.
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images
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also
widely
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images
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to transmit complex messages. To convey a point of view you need words to
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exactly what you want If there are
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each person will interpret in their
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way. Words are
also
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in teaching. To teach children to read, write and speak. They are
also
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communication
. To communicate information and orders in the workplace.

To conclude
,
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images
and words go hand in hand and one cannot
fully
emphasize
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, these two elements have their respective roles:
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Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay Some people think that killing animals for food is cruel, but others claim that animals are a necessary part of a diet. What is your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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