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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. Discuss both options and give example. v.1

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. v. 1
Having a pet animal at home has now become a common trend in every household these days. A few argue that having pets is an excellent idea, as they help in the overall development of their child, while others believe that, it can be risky and can cause health problems. This essay will discuss both these views and in my opinion, small children are always at risk in the presence of pets. Generally, people keep animals at their household as they feel that having them will improve the mental health of their child, as they are always available for them even when parents are at work. They think that the animal will help to improve the emotional development by not letting them feel lonely. For example, a recent survey showed that children who have pets at a residence tend to more warm and welcoming when compared to others of their age group. Hence, having pets is considered to be an excellent idea. Despite all the benefits, these animals cannot be controlled at times, which can pose a serious threat to the children. Additionally, they can cause some serious health issues, like skin diseases, which are easily transmitted by touch. For instance, a newspaper article published yesterday stated that, the number of children who have had incidents of pet bite have increased by five percent compared to last year. Therefore, there will always be a danger looming when there are pets at home. In conclusion, nowadays domestic animals are very frequently seen in the majority of homes. This essay discussed that, even though having them around can have some good effects on the overall growth of a child, their presence can always pose a risk. I opine that, having pets at a residence is not a great option.
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a pet
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animal
at home has
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now
become a common trend in every household these days. A few argue that
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having
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pets
is an excellent
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idea
, as they
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help
in the
overall
development of their child, while others believe that, it can be risky and can cause health problems. This essay will discuss both these views and in my opinion,
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small
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children
are always at
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in the presence of pets.

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,
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people
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keep
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having
them will
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improve
the mental health of their child, as they are always available for them even when parents are at work. They
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think
that the
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will
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help
to
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improve
the emotional development by not letting them feel lonely.
For example
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that
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children
who have
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at a residence tend to more warm and welcoming when compared to others of their age group.
Hence
,
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having
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pets
is considered
to be an excellent
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.

Despite all the benefits, these
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cannot
be controlled
at times, which can pose a serious threat to the
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children
.
Additionally
, they can cause
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some
serious health issues, like skin diseases, which are
easily
transmitted by touch.
For instance
, a newspaper article published yesterday stated that, the number of
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children
who have had incidents of pet bite have increased by five percent compared to last year.
Therefore
, there will always be a
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danger
looming when there are
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pets
at home.

In conclusion
, nowadays domestic
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animals
are
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very
frequently
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seen
in the majority of homes. This essay discussed that,
even though
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having
them around can have
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some
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good
effects on the
overall
growth of a child, their presence can always pose a
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risk
. I opine that,
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having
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pets
at a residence is not a great option.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while, others think that it is dangerous and unhealthy which opinion do you agree with. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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