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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples. v.2

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 2
Nowadays, having a pet in a family is a common situation and it has significantly increased in every community. However, pet-related injuries and growing bad health conditions remain a controversial issue. In this essay will describe both negative effects and psychological benefits which can receive to the children by having pets. Obviously, it is true that toxic pets like sneaks, spiders and etc are definitely dangerous and even can be harmful to human life. No matter how, the majority of children have friendly pets like dogs, cats, fish etc. Those pets are recommended as a domestic pet which is safe and suitable for children. However, many people argue that having a pet can cause serious health problems to human especially children like skin allergies, asthma and sometimes rabies. I highly recommend that before having a pet they should be vaccinated to confirm that they produce immunity against disease and whoever having allergic reaction must stay away from animals. Besides that having a pet in a family is very useful for children and adults as well. Many scientists suggest and approved having pets improve our mood and health. Playing with the pets and take care of them like feeding, grooming and training them are more enjoyable and enthusiastic for children mind. Moreover, some pets, especially dogs can train as a caretaker for people who are disabled and adults who are physically weak. In addition, Having pets like fish are more useful for reducing stress, help children with negative emotions and beneficial for attraction in the house. In conclusion, I strongly believe that keeping a pet in a family can and advantage to prevent depression in children and adults.
Nowadays,
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having
a pet in a family is a common situation and it has
significantly
increased in every community.
However
, pet-related injuries and growing
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bad
health conditions remain a controversial issue. In this essay will
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describe
both
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negative
effects and psychological benefits which can receive to the
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children
by
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having
pets.

Obviously
, it is true that toxic
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pets
like sneaks, spiders
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are definitely
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dangerous
and even can be harmful to human life. No matter how, the majority of
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children
have friendly
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pets
like dogs, cats, fish etc. Those
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pets
are recommended
as a domestic pet which is safe and suitable for
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children
.
However
,
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many
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people
argue that
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a pet can cause serious health problems to human
especially
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children
like skin allergies, asthma and
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sometimes
rabies. I
highly
recommend that
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having
a pet they should
be vaccinated
to confirm that they produce immunity against disease and whoever
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having
allergic reaction
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must
stay away from animals.
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that
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having
a pet in a family is
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very
useful for
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children
and adults
as well
.
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scientists suggest and approved
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having
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pets
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improve
our mood and health. Playing with the
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pets
and take care of them like feeding, grooming and training them are more enjoyable and enthusiastic for
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children
mind.

Moreover
,
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some
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pets
,
especially
dogs can train as a caretaker for
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people
who
are disabled
and adults who are
physically
weak.
In addition
,
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Having
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pets
like fish are more useful for reducing
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stress
,
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help
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children
with
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negative
emotions and beneficial for attraction in the
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house
.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that keeping a pet in a family can and advantage to
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prevent
depression in
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children
and adults.
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IELTS essay Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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