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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples. v.1

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 1
Some people believe that technology is now an irreplaceable study device for young people. Others, nonetheless, think that it is harmful to the studying process. Although, some people believe that the phenomenon has no harmful effects on young people, I agree that the harmful effects outweigh the invaluable. When modern equipment is integrated into lessons, students are expected to be more interested in the subjects they are studying. It's provides different opportunities to make learning more fun and enjoyable in terms of teaching the same things in new ways. Moreover, no one learns in the same way because of different learning styles and different abilities. Technology provides great opportunities for making learning more effective for everyone with different needs. Also, modern learning is about collaborating with others, critical thinking, developing different forms of communication and leadership skills, and improving motivation and productivity. On the other hand, there are many dangerous disadvantages of using an electric device as a study tool such as misguided due to the wrong information which can severely harm their educational development. Beside this, automation made student lazy and stubborn. It gives them the power and the opportunity to control everything with a few clicks of the mouse. Cheating is illegal, but the machinery has made it easy with all the resources contained in it. Most importantly, this can lead to the extinction of good handwriting, instead of writing with a pen or pencil, they are likely to type in device and save into the respective folders. Furthermore, the library will be closed soon since EBooks is taking over the normal books, they can easily download it from the internet instead of going to the store. Generally, they might overuse the modern equipment and see some appropriate stuff which can lead to do an illegal crime like cyber bullying. Above all, when young people use tech devices, they have less human interaction. Teachers and parents worry that lack of face to face socializing will leave students unable to communicate effectively when they need to have a real-life conversation. To conclude, although automation is an invaluable study tool for young, it can also affect young people with their mindset of using modern machinery. Teachers and parents should balance the time for them and try to communicate with them more.
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think
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people
, I
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expected
to be more interested in the subjects they are studying. It's provides
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different
opportunities to
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make
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learning
more fun and enjoyable in terms of teaching the same things in new ways.
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in the same way
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because
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different
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learning
styles and
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different
abilities. Technology provides great opportunities for making
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learning
more effective for everyone with
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different
needs.
Also
,
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modern
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learning
is about collaborating with others, critical thinking, developing
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different
forms of communication and leadership
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skills
, and improving motivation and productivity.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
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dangerous
disadvantages of using an electric
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device
as a study tool such as misguided due to the
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wrong
information which can
severely
harm their educational development. Beside this, automation made student lazy and stubborn. It gives them the power and the opportunity to control everything with a few clicks of the mouse. Cheating is illegal,
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but
the machinery has made it easy with all the resources contained in it. Most
importantly
, this can lead to the extinction of
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good
handwriting,
instead
of writing with a pen or pencil, they are likely to type in
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device
and save into the respective folders.
Furthermore
, the library will
be closed
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soon
since
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EBooks
is taking over the normal books, they can
easily
download it from the internet
instead
of going to the store.
Generally
, they might overuse the
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modern
equipment and
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see
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some
appropriate stuff which can lead to do an illegal crime like
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cyber bullying
.
Above all
, when
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young
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people
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use
tech
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devices
, they have less human interaction. Teachers and parents worry that lack of face to face socializing will
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leave
students unable to communicate
effectively
when they need to have a real-life conversation.

To conclude
, although automation is an invaluable study tool for
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young
, it can
also
affect
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young
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people
with their mindset of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
machinery. Teachers and parents should balance the time for them and try to communicate with them more.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay Some people think that keeping pets is good for children and adults while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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