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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with discuss both view and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with v. 2
Nowadays, most of the parents who like to keep animals at home for own their adults because it advantages more to reduce the isolation and loneliness. While, few individual feel that having a pet increase more horrible aliments and allergies. I strongly agree with the idea that keeping pet at home children become more caring and funny, I believe that it just waste of time and money. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of keeping pets for children considerably outweigh it' s disadvantages. Firstly, there is no doubt that majority of people in society who feel that animals such as dog abd cat just like our family members. Moreover, they also take responsibility to care the animals like our adults. Animals play an important role in human life and encourage more to children for brisk walking in daily routine for this reason adults feel always energetic and reduce to stress and anxiety. To illustrate, in contemporary era printing a lot of articles about animals that they caught the burglars at night and protect the family members life. As far as I am concerned that animals like best friend or buddy. On the other hand it is possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that the infect of there are number of dangerous diseases born through keeping animals at home which is more concerning issue for children. For instance, sometimes having a pet can be very messy and if you are one of those cleanliness freaks then you always ways have to be on your toes to watch for all the clutter and filth your pet is creating around the house. In conclusion, I believe that if they not trained properly or during sickness they can urinate, vomit and poop inside your home that you will have to clean up every time than no extra time for own adults.
Nowadays, most of the parents who like to
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keep
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animals
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their
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adults
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because
it advantages more to
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reduce
the isolation and loneliness. While, few individual feel that having a pet increase more horrible aliments and allergies. I
strongly
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agree
with the
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idea
that keeping pet at home
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children
become more caring and
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funny
, I believe that it
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just
waste of time and money.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that the benefits of keeping
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pets
for
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children
considerably
outweigh
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#039; s disadvantages.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that majority of
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people
in society who feel that
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animals
such as dog
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abd
cat
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just
like our family members.
Moreover
, they
also
take responsibility to care the
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animals
like our
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adults
.
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Animals
play an
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important
role in human life and encourage more to
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children
for brisk walking in daily routine
for this reason
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adults
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feel always
energetic and
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reduce
to
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stress
and anxiety. To illustrate, in contemporary era printing
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a lot of
articles about
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animals
that they caught the burglars at night and protect the family members life. As far as I
am concerned
that
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animals
like best friend or buddy.

On the other hand
it is possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that the
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infect
of there are number of
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dangerous
diseases born through keeping
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animals
at home which is more concerning issue for
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children
.
For instance
,
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sometimes
having a pet can be
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very
messy and if you are one of those cleanliness freaks then you always ways
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have to
be on your toes to
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watch
for all the clutter and filth your pet is creating around the
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house
.

In conclusion
, I believe that if they not trained
properly
or during sickness they can urinate, vomit and
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poop
inside your home that you will
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have to
clean up every time than no extra time for
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own
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adults
.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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