Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with v. 1
The environmental issue is the most debated topic of present time due to increase in the global warming effect. It is often said by people that one person unable to make a difference in the environment, but the people who actually do something is the authority and huge business individuals. This essay will strongly not concur with the above notion due to various reasons. Primarily, this essay will discuss how everybody's contribution has the capacity to bring some changes and not solely the authority and huge companies. I personally believe that if we work as a team then surely we can save the environment. To start with, single person alone can reduce the detrimental effect on the earth. By changing their daily habits such as using recycle bags instead of plastic bags because paper bags can decompose easily in comparison to polythene bags. But, this action requires an inner voice of the public where they are genuinely willing doing something for the future generation. For instance, Last year dump data of the UK shown that plastic usages has decreased up to 50% this year due to awareness in the civilians. Additionally, citizens are informed by government awareness programs like, session on how to save the earth and if not followed by people than they would be penalized. As a result, they are afraid of paying penalty and hence, they follow the rules. If what people does not care about the fine as well then any rigorous rules also will be unsuccessful because of the lack of public support. As a result, no change will be there and boost in the bad effects. For example, Environmental department surveyed few permanent residence in the USA and revealed that 70% people do because they do not want to get penalized. In general, no one alone is able to bring a change but, we all have to do something to save the earth. This will successful if we work as a team. However, for some kind of civilian there should be some strict regulation in which they do not have another choice accept following the direction. Then, surely some changes would occur.
The environmental issue is the most debated topic of present time due to increase in the global warming effect. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
said by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that one person unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a difference in the environment,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who actually do something is the authority and huge business individuals. This essay will
strongly
not concur with the above notion due to various reasons.
Primarily
, this essay will discuss how everybody's contribution has the capacity to bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
and not
solely
the authority and huge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
. I
personally
believe that if we work as a team then
surely
we can save the environment.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, single person alone can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the detrimental effect on the earth. By changing their daily habits such as using recycle
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
instead
of plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
can decompose
easily
in comparison
to polythene
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, this action requires an inner voice of the public where they are
genuinely
willing doing something for the future generation.
For instance
, Last year dump data of the UK shown that plastic usages has decreased up to 50% this year due to awareness in the civilians.

Additionally
, citizens
are informed
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
awareness programs like, session on how to save the earth and if not followed by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
than they would
be penalized
.
As a result
, they are afraid of paying penalty and
hence
, they follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. If what
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
does
not care about the fine
as well
Comparison is written 'as well "as"'.
then
any rigorous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
also
will be unsuccessful
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the lack of public support.
As a result
, no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
will be there and boost in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effects.
For example
, Environmental department surveyed few permanent residence in the USA and revealed that 70%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
penalized.

In general
, no one alone is able to bring a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, we all
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do something to save the earth. This will successful if we work as a team.
However
, for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
kind of civilian there should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
strict regulation in which they do not have another choice accept following the direction. Then,
surely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
would occur.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts