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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. v.2

Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. v. 2
With the advent of globalisation, a common language to facilitate trade and communication seems inevitable. Some oppose the development of a single language on the grounds that it may lead to cultural erosion and a loss of local linguistic knowledge. Yet, I am of the opinion that it is possible to use an official international language and still retain one’s own language and culture. Firstly, many countries already use an official language or languages. For example, in India, there are two official languages: Hindi and English. In a country such as India where there are innumerable languages spoken, there is a need for official languages to ensure communication between different sections of the population and the different states. In China, where different dialects are spoken, Mandarin, the official language, enables people from different provinces to comprehend each other. Secondly, in an age of rampant globalisation, there is no doubt that an international language is inevitable. How is an African businessman going to conduct businesses in China when there are such differences between their languages? In this sense, not only is an international language inevitable, but also a necessity for trade, commerce and economic expansion in the 21st century. The critics opposing the adoption of an international official language argue that it would lead to a loss of cultural identity. However, the use of an international official language doesn’t mean that local languages will die out. For example, English already functions as a kind of unofficial international language but this doesn’t mean that people solely converse in English or they neglect their own language. English is used in specific contexts (trade, business, etc) and native languages are used for everyday instruction. In brief, as the world becomes smaller the need for an official international language seems unavoidable. English has already assumed this role although its status is unofficial. In my view, the use of either an official or unofficial international language is necessary to facilitate communication in a time of rapid globalisation.
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to facilitate trade and communication seems inevitable.
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on the grounds that it may lead to cultural erosion and a loss of local linguistic knowledge.
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: Hindi and English. In a country such as India where there are innumerable
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spoken, there is a need for
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to ensure communication between
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sections of the population and the
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states. In China, where
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is inevitable. How is an African businessman going to conduct businesses in China when there are such differences between their
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a necessity for trade, commerce and economic expansion in the 21st century.

The critics opposing the adoption of an
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argue that it would lead to a loss of cultural identity.
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In brief
, as the world becomes smaller the need for an
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seems unavoidable. English has already assumed this role although its status is unofficial. In my view, the
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of either an
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or unofficial
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is necessary to facilitate communication in a time of rapid
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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