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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for you v.1

Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for you v. 1
The rise in living standards of people over the time has also reshaped their shopping patterns. Instead of buying regularly from any small local shop, they prefer to travel and buy occasionally from a big store or a shopping plaza, which in turn has led to the closure of many small indigenous shops. In my opinion, this is a positive development which has resulted due to the downsides of shopping from the local small stores. This essay will outline some of the merits of shopping from the big malls and explain why this changing trend is a positive one. The increasing number of shopping malls around the world has provided the shoppers with the benefit of one-stop shopping. People can buy anything they want, starting from a basic grocery item to a sophisticated technological item under single roof. The availability of variety in a particular product category has made the selection more satisfying. This trend has reduced the related hassles and the amount of efforts which people have to put in while purchasing different items from different local small stores. Indeed, such development has made people lives easier. Additionally, these big shopping stores have also raised the bar of the financial returns and better employment opportunities. The presence of multiple brands with attractive marketing strategies is taking the advantage of customers’ impulse buying behaviour. This extensively researched behaviour in the marketing regime has been realised as a significant contributor to shop owners' sales and profits, which in turn also bring more revenue for the country. Despite this, the construction of these giant shopping centres also creates various job vacancies in the society with remunerations that are far better from being employed in a small store. In conclusion, the perks of shopping from big plazas and malls have increased the inflow of customers, resulting in closure of various small indigenous shops. However, besides the negative impact of the closure of the native shops, this development has proved to be constructive for the society in many aspects.
The rise in living standards of
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people
over the time has
also
reshaped their
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shopping
patterns.
Instead
of buying
regularly
from any
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small
local
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shop
, they prefer to travel and
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buy
occasionally
from a
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big
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store
or a
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shopping
plaza, which in turn has led to the closure of
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many
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small
indigenous
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shops
. In my opinion, this is a
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positive
development which has resulted due to the downsides of
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shopping
from the local
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small
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stores
. This essay will outline
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some of the
merits of
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shopping
from the
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big
malls and
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explain
why this changing trend is a
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positive
one.

The increasing number of
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shopping
malls around the world has provided the shoppers with the benefit of one-
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stop
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shopping
.
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People
can
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buy
anything they want, starting from a basic grocery item to a sophisticated technological item under single roof. The availability of variety in a particular product category has made the selection more satisfying. This trend has
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reduced
the related hassles and the amount of efforts which
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people
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have to
put in while purchasing
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different
items from
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different
local
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small
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stores
.
Indeed
, such development has made
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people
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lives
easier.

Additionally
, these
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big
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shopping
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stores
have
also
raised the bar of the financial returns and better employment opportunities. The presence of multiple brands with attractive marketing strategies is taking the advantage of customers’ impulse buying
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behaviour
. This
extensively
researched
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behaviour
in the marketing regime has been
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realised
as a significant contributor to
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shop
owners' sales and profits, which in turn
also
bring more revenue for the country. Despite this, the construction of these giant
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shopping
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centres
also
creates various job vacancies in the society with remunerations that are far better from
being employed
in a
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small
store.

In conclusion
, the perks of
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shopping
from
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big
plazas and malls have increased the inflow of customers, resulting in closure of various
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small
indigenous
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shops
.
However
,
besides
the
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negative
impact of the closure of the native
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shops
, this development has proved to be constructive for the society in
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many
aspects.
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and would cause a loss of culture. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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