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ReciprocityReciprocity is an interchange between parties in which both sides benefit equally. Reciprocity is based on sharing and balance. To share is to bond. Sharing establishes a reciprocal relationship that is not easily denied. People give in order t v.1

ReciprocityReciprocity is an interchange between parties in which both sides benefit equally. Reciprocity is based on sharing and balance. To share is to bond. Sharing establishes a reciprocal relationship that is not easily denied. People give in order t v. 1
Shopping has become an integral part of our life. Young people are more attracted to this habit than older people and it has almost become their favourite hobby. While there are many reasons attributed to this habit such as increased spending power and peer influences, some people argue that they should be encouraged to spend their time wisely in other useful activities and I completely agree with that because time is the most precious thing in the world. For one thing, the increased spending power is one of the main reasons for this addiction to shopping in our society. Compared to the past, there are many job opportunities available in the market and most of them are ready to pay fat pay checks. Our young people now have plenty of disposable income they don’t know how to spend. Secondly, they are easily getting influenced by their peers who might be doing window shopping almost every week, for no reasons. The recent survey on Bayshore Shopping Mall business in Vladivostok city, conducted by marketing researchers, indicates that the majority of their sales are coming from younger people who had just started their career. Having said that, some people argue that our young society needs to be diverted and encouraged to spend their free time in more better and useful ways. I strongly agree with that, because the only thing that cannot be retrieved back is “the time”. Instead of spending time in shopping malls, we should encourage them to involve in physical activities such as sports and games. Or they can join a course that enhances their skill sets. For instance, those in the software field can spend their time in learning Artificial Intelligence, which is growing very fast in today’s market. In conclusion, while it is true that young people are getting attracted towards frequent shopping, they should be encouraged to spend their free time more wisely on activities that could help them to lead a more comfortable and healthy life.
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Young
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are more attracted to this habit than older
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people
and it has almost become their
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hobby. While there are
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reasons attributed to this habit such as increased spending power and peer influences,
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some
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people
argue that they should
be encouraged
to
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spend
their
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time
wisely
in other useful activities and I completely
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agree
with that
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because
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time
is the most precious thing in the world.

For one thing, the increased spending power is one of the main reasons for this addiction to
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shopping
in our society. Compared to the past, there are
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many
job opportunities available in the market and most of them are ready to pay
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fat
pay
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checks
. Our
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young
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people
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now
have
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plenty
of disposable income they don’t know how to spend.

Secondly
, they are
easily
getting influenced by their peers who might be doing window
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shopping
almost every week, for no reasons. The recent survey on
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Bayshore
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Shopping
Mall business in Vladivostok city, conducted by marketing researchers, indicates that the majority of their sales are coming from younger
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people
who had
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just
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started
their career.

Having said that,
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some
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people
argue that our
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young
society needs to
be diverted
and encouraged to
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spend
their free
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time
in
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more better
and useful ways. I
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agree
with that,
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because
the
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only
thing that cannot
be retrieved
back is “the
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time”
.
Instead
of spending
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time
in
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shopping
malls, we should encourage them to involve in physical activities such as sports and games. Or they can
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join
a course that enhances their
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skill
sets.
For instance
, those in the software field can
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spend
their
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time
in learning Artificial Intelligence, which is growing
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very
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fast
in
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today
’s market.

In conclusion
, while it is true that
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young
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people
are getting attracted towards frequent
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shopping
, they should
be encouraged
to
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spend
their free
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time
more
wisely
on activities that could
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help
them to lead a more comfortable and healthy life.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay ReciprocityReciprocity is an interchange between parties in which both sides benefit equally. Reciprocity is based on sharing and balance. To share is to bond. Sharing establishes a reciprocal relationship that is not easily denied. People give in order t v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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