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Some people think that it is beneficial for old people to learn something new while others believe that once a person in the past 65 years of age it is too late to learn. What is your opinion? v.2

Some people think that it is beneficial for old people to learn something new while others believe that once a person in the past 65 years of age it is too late to learn. What is your opinion? v. 2
There is no doubt that one can learn at any age of life. There is no limit to learning. Some people believe that old people do learn new things. While others argue the age limit. In my opinion, learning is beneficial at any time, it gives a personal experience and knowledge. To begin with, some people believe that after 65 years people can not learn and it is too late. Some specific tasks required a specific time period, age limit and skills. For example, for higher studies let say CA. For this, specific time and age required. Therefore, some tasks are specifically designed for a certain period of time. On the other hand, some people believe that old people can learn new things and it will be helpful for them. For instance, with the growing technology and excessive usage of smartphones. The old people can easily learn how to operate the smartphone, there is no rocket science to understand the usage of the phone. Furthermore, as they use the more they will reveal more features and will feel entertained. To sum up, learning new things keeps the mind fresh and helps to remain active and enthusiastic. When it comes to old people, they can learn new things according to their skills and capacity. By doing this, they always ready to learn new things and feel busy.
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of life. There is no limit to learning.
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people
believe that
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learn
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age
limit. In my opinion, learning is beneficial at any time, it gives a personal experience and knowledge.

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believe that after 65 years
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people
can not
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learn
and it is too late.
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Some
specific tasks required a specific time period,
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age
limit and
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skills
.
For example
, for higher studies
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say CA. For this, specific time and
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age
required.
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,
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some
tasks are
specifically
designed for a certain period of time.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that
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old
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people
can
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learn
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new
things and it will be helpful for them.
For instance
, with the growing technology and excessive usage of smartphones. The
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old
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people
can
easily
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learn
how to operate the smartphone, there is no rocket science to understand the usage of the phone.
Furthermore
, as they
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use
the more they will reveal more features and will feel entertained.

To sum up, learning
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new
things
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keeps
the mind fresh and
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helps
to remain active and enthusiastic. When it
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comes
to
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old
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people
, they can
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learn
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new
things according to their
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skills
and capacity. By doing this, they always ready to
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learn
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new
things and feel busy.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is beneficial for old people to learn something new while others believe that once a person in the past 65 years of age it is too late to learn. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
226 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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