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Some people think that it is a good idea to have a detailed plan for activities to do in their free time. Others disagree with this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that it is a good idea to have a detailed plan for activities to do in their free time. Others disagree with this. v. 1
The modern society is generating an increasing amount of waste and the waste management has become one of the pressing issues both in developing and developed countries. With the inevitable rise in population and industrialisation, this problem will be further aggravated. The government can help decrease waste production by educating the public and by promoting recycling. The global population has reached a staggering seven billion recently. Solid waste is a by-product of this phenomenon. This number is expected to balloon to nine billion by 2050 if the current trend goes on. The amount of trash produced is likewise expected to rise. Manufacturing industries also contribute to the total of accumulated waste. While market demands go higher, the number of factories built also increases to satisfy this demand. This unsavoury problem has taken centre stage as the world focused on tackling global warming. One way that the government can help alleviate this burden on the environment is by educating the culprits – the general public. By promoting the use of reusable bags when shopping, the amount of plastic bags can be greatly reduced. Furthermore, the government can also run advertisements and put up posters in ways that a household can reduce the trash it generates. Another step that the government may undertake is through sound recycling. It must invest in a technology that can be managed through the municipal level. To encourage its citizens to adhere to this program, collection areas for recyclable materials must be accessible. Sweden has set these areas within 300 meters from residential areas and so far they are succeeding. To conclude, it is a fact that the human population will continue to rise. In order for the world’s natural resources remain sustainable, the government and the public must cooperate to find a solution to this ever-present problem.
The modern society is generating an increasing amount of
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waste
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
management has become one of the pressing issues both in developing and
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developed countries
. With the inevitable rise in population and
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industrialisation
, this problem will be
further
aggravated. The
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government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
decrease
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
production by educating the public and by promoting recycling.

The global population has reached a staggering seven billion recently. Solid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
is a by-product of this phenomenon. This number is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to balloon to nine billion by 2050 if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
trend goes on. The amount of trash produced is
likewise
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to rise. Manufacturing industries
also
contribute to the total of accumulated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
. While market demands go higher, the number of factories built
also
increases to satisfy this demand.

This
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unsavoury
problem has taken
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
stage as the world focused on tackling global warming. One way that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
alleviate this burden on the environment is by educating the culprits
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
the
Consider using "public".
general public
. By promoting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of reusable bags when shopping, the amount of plastic bags can be
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.
Furthermore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
can
also
run advertisements and put up posters in ways that a household can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the trash it generates. Another step that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
may undertake is through sound recycling. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
invest in a technology that can
be managed
through the municipal level. To encourage its citizens to adhere to this program, collection areas for recyclable materials
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be accessible. Sweden has set these areas within 300 meters from residential areas and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
far they are succeeding.

To conclude
, it is a fact that the human population will continue to rise. In order for the world’s natural resources remain sustainable, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and the public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
cooperate to find a solution to this ever-present problem.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is a good idea to have a detailed plan for activities to do in their free time. Others disagree with this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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