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Some people think that international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinions. v.1

Some people think that international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. v. 1
Nowadays, people tend to go aboard for their vacations due to that ravelling by plane has become more affordable under the help of modern technology; therefore, tourism is booming in many countries worldwide. Meanwhile,   the negative impacts on local communities brought by tourists should be assessed. To start with, it is a fact that tourists could disturb local residents daily life activities, even though they create revenue incomes for local governments. Local entertainment activities and festival events hold to attract more visitors will create some inconvenience to local residents in many ways.   For example, vehicles hired for visitors will lead to traffic congestion. The festival activities will cause traffic jams and disturb residents' routine daily life as well. Moreover, local native resources will be redistributed to meet the demand of visitors, which will result in higher prices or shortage for local residents. In addition, increasing visitors in many countries may lead to many illegal activities in local communities. For example, with the increasing night shows in bars, substance use and crime rate may surge up in the regions. Furthermore, local residents will be influenced by the novel ideas brought by visitors, which may lead to their personal valves change as well. Local residents, especially the youth, might pick up harmful habits from visitors, such as substance use,  or smoking. In summary, tourism will contribute to the local economy; however, it also disturbs local residents' traditional daily lives due to tourist activities. Without strict guiding tourists, they also create many potential illegal issues when they enjoy their happy hours.  Therefore, local governments should provide safety instruction for visitors and assist tourism companies to establish the right agenda for visitors to follow.
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ravelling
by
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plane
has become more affordable under the
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help
of modern technology;
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many
countries worldwide. Meanwhile,
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the
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negative
impacts on
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local
communities brought by
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tourists
should
be assessed
.

To
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start
with, it is a fact that
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tourists
could disturb
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local
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residents
daily life
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activities
,
even though
they create revenue incomes for
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local
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governments
.
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entertainment
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activities
and festival 
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events
hold to attract more
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visitors
will create
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some
inconvenience to local
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residents
in
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many
ways.
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For example
, vehicles hired for
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visitors
will lead to traffic congestion. The festival
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activities
will cause traffic jams and disturb residents' routine daily life
as well
.
Moreover
,
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local
native resources will
be redistributed
to
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meet
the demand of
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visitors
, which will result in higher prices or shortage for
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local
residents.

In addition
, increasing
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visitors
in
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many
countries may lead to 
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many
illegal
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activities
in
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local
communities.
For example
, with the increasing night
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shows
in bars, substance
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use
 and crime rate may surge up in the regions.
Furthermore
,
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local
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residents
will
be influenced
by the novel
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ideas
brought by
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visitors
, which may lead to their personal valves
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change
as well
.
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Local
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residents
,
especially
the youth, might pick up harmful habits from
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visitors
, such as substance
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use
,
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or smoking.

In summary, tourism will contribute to the
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local
economy;
however
, it
also
disturbs
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local
residents' traditional daily
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lives
due to
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tourist
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activities
. Without strict guiding
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tourists
, they
also
create
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many
potential illegal issues when they enjoy their happy hours.  
Therefore
,
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local
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governments
should provide safety instruction for
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visitors
and assist tourism
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companies
to establish the right agenda for
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visitors
to follow.
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IELTS essay Some people think that international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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