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Some people think that instead of preventing the climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that instead of preventing the climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 2
The Earth's climate is changing faster than expected. Some people have the opinion that we should figure out a solution to live with climatic variations, rather than stop it. This essay will discuss why it is entirely essential to stop the fluctuations in weather, despite having few solutions to adjust to it. Drastic changes in weather conditions in recent years are changing our lifestyles. Human is finding different ways to escape the consequences of climatic alterations which has created harsh living conditions worldwide. In order to overcome the high temperature, the air-conditioner is used in shops, hospitals and education institutions. Also, the scientists are spending slew of time on research to invent a clothing material which can sustain extreme cold and hot atmosphere. Furthermore, most of the countries have drafted rules and regulations to protect its citizens from getting exposed to such environmental conditions. For example, some nations in the middle east have not only ordered its people to remain indoors, but also companies to remain shut until the sun set - a measure taken to avoid dust storm. Admittedly, though it is difficult, at present, humans don't have an alternative other than adjusting to atmospheric change. But on the contrary, above mentioned remedies are of no use if we don't stop the bad weather conditions fully. Firstly, it is impossible to install every room with mechanical devices which can create the ambient temperature to live. Moreover, these machines are known for depleting the ozone layer which shields the high frequency radiations from reaching the earth's atmosphere. In addition, oceanic level is on the rise due to the melting of ice glaciers in the earth's northern and the southern poles because of the overall increase in our planet's warmth. Obviously, it is very essential that every human being does his best in saving the environment that we live, by minimizing the usage of goods which are directly or indirectly causing the global warming. The climate crisis is a real threat for the entire humankind. To conclude, even though we can modify our day-to-day living style, a permanent fix is a must for ending the current crisis. In my opinion, climate change needs to be prevented completely, even though there are temporary workarounds to overcome the same.
The Earth's climate is changing faster than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have the opinion that we should figure out a solution to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with climatic variations,
rather
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
it. This essay will discuss why it is
entirely
essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the fluctuations in weather, despite having few solutions to adjust to it.

Drastic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in weather conditions in recent years are changing our lifestyles. Human is finding
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways to escape the consequences of climatic alterations which has created harsh living conditions worldwide. In order to overcome the high temperature, the air-conditioner is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in shops, hospitals and education institutions.
Also
, the scientists are spending slew of time on research to invent a clothing material which can sustain extreme
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
and hot atmosphere.
Furthermore
, most of the countries have drafted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations to protect its citizens from getting exposed to such environmental conditions.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
nations in the
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
middle east
have not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
ordered its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to remain indoors,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to remain shut until the sun set
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
a measure taken to avoid dust storm.
Admittedly
, though it is difficult, at present, humans don't have an alternative other than adjusting to atmospheric
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
on the contrary
, above mentioned remedies are of no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
if we don't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
weather conditions
fully
.
Firstly
, it is impossible to install every room with mechanical devices which can create the ambient temperature to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
Moreover
, these machines
are known
for depleting the ozone layer which shields the high frequency radiations from reaching the earth's atmosphere.
In addition
, oceanic level is on the rise due to the melting of ice glaciers in the earth's northern and the southern poles
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the
overall
increase in our planet's warmth.
Obviously
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
essential that every human being does his best in saving the environment that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
, by minimizing the usage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
which are
directly
or
indirectly
causing the global warming.

The climate crisis is a real threat for the entire humankind.
To conclude
,
even though
we can modify our day-to-day living style, a permanent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for ending the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
crisis. In my opinion, climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
needs to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
completely,
even though
there are temporary workarounds to overcome the same.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing the climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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