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some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. to what extent do you agree or disagree v.7

some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 7
Nowadays, climate change represent an import part of the worls actual issue. The temperature grow up cotinuously and the it is constated that the glaciers melt is speed up. Our habit affect the nature, so for this reason many people think that the best way to face this problem is to learn how to live with this condition. however, it is preferable to resolve the problem by changing the way we live. I believe that this too late so we have to learn how to live with climate change, but household and industies should start to become more environmentally friendly and apply more restricted policy. First of all, waste is the main cause of higher temperature. Rubbish can be constated under different form such as chemical product or household waste. Indeed, they represent the major factor of pollution. Chemical for example, are dump in river and the dangerous particles containing in these products kill sea animals and increase the temperature of the water. Unfortunately, the higher degree of ocean are the main reason of glacier melting, but without glacier it is impossible for the earth to maintain a living condition for inhabitants. Acoording to the professor Montlevi in his article for the CNRS, it is estimated that in 2060 the daily temperature will be over 40°C all the year. Therefore, I believe that industries should start to look for biologic alternative to chemical product. Moreover, globalisation are also responsible of climate change. In 2050, it is estimated that we will be 7 billion people in the world. The main preoccupation of the governments and industries is to feed them. For this reason they favorise overproductions of food and agriculture. However, agriculture need field particularly for countries who are in charge of producing food for all the population. Generally, agricultor take it by burning forest to increase their hectars of crops. For instance, Amazonia is known to be the lung of the world but also for being the main productor of meal. In this part of the world we can constate a real issue because government encourage agricultar to burn forest for increase the quantity of crop, but with deforestation the level of air decrease. Consequently, without trees to help them to breath and the liberation of CO2 by burning forest it accelerates the climate change. In conclusion, pollution is the main responsible factor of the degradation of our climate. this is due to our bad habits by throwing chemical product in rivers and favorise overconsumption by producing more than our real needs.
Nowadays,
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climate
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change
represent an import part of the
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worls
actual issue. The
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temperature
grow up
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cotinuously
and
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the it
is
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constated
that the glaciers melt is
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speed up
. Our habit
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affect
the nature,
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so
for this reason
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many
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people
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think
that the best way to face this problem is to learn how to
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live
with this condition.
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however
, it is preferable to resolve the problem by changing the way we
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live
. I believe that this too late
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so
we
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have to
learn how to
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live
with
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climate
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change
,
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but
household and
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industies
should
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start
to become more
environmentally
friendly and apply more restricted policy.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, waste is the
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main
cause of higher
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temperature
. Rubbish can be
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constated
under
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different
form such as
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chemical
product or household waste.
Indeed
, they represent the major factor of pollution.
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Chemical
for example
, are dump in river and the
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dangerous
particles containing in these products kill sea animals and increase the
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temperature
of the water. Unfortunately, the higher degree of ocean are the
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main
reason of glacier melting,
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but
without glacier it is impossible for the earth to maintain a living condition for inhabitants.
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Acoording
to the professor
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Montlevi
in his article for the CNRS, it
is estimated
that in 2060 the daily
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temperature
will be over
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40°C
all the year.
Therefore
, I believe that industries should
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start
to look for biologic alternative to
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chemical
product.

Moreover
,
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globalisation
are
also
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responsible of
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climate
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change
. In 2050, it
is estimated
that we will be 7 billion
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people
in the world. The
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main
preoccupation of the
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governments
and industries is to feed them.
For this reason
they
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favorise
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overproductions
of food and agriculture.
However
, agriculture need field
particularly
for countries who are in charge of producing food for all the population.
Generally
,
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agricultor
take it by burning forest to increase their
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hectars
of crops.
For instance
,
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Amazonia
is known
to be the lung of the world
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but
also
for being the
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main
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productor
of meal. In this part of the world we can
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constate
a real issue
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because
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government
encourage
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agricultar
to burn forest for increase the quantity of crop,
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but
with deforestation the level of air decrease.
Consequently
, without trees to
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help
them to breath and the liberation of CO2 by burning forest it accelerates the
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climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

In conclusion
, pollution is the
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main
responsible factor of the degradation of our
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climate
.
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this
is due to our
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bad
habits by throwing
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chemical
product in rivers and
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favorise
overconsumption by producing more than our real needs.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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