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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v.3

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 3
Museums and monuments showcase the rich history and culture of a nation. Most of these places attract a large number of tourists; however, local people show little interest in them. There are several reasons behind this trend. To start with, local people give museums and historical places a miss because they offer nothing new to them. They are already familiar with their culture and history and perhaps have nothing new to discover by frequenting the same museums again and again. A tourist, on the other hand, may enjoy visiting a museum or monument because of the numerous windows they open to the past. Another reason that dissuades local people from visiting museums is that they are rarely updated. What they showcase this month is in no way different from what they showcased last month or last year. Therefore, although they will figure in a tourist’s itinerary, for natives regular visits to such places are quite boring. Cost could also be a factor. Most museums and monuments charge an entry fee which could be an issue for low or middle income families. The government and local authorities can take several simple steps to rekindle locals’ interest in museums. They can, for example, organize regular exhibitions, cultural events and light shows that provide visitors a new experience every time they visit these places. Scraping the entry fee may also help. To conclude, if local people prefer to stay away from museums and monuments, that is because these institutions fail to offer new experiences to them. Authorities should consider organizing various cultural programmes and shows at these places to encourage more local people to visit them.
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showcase the rich history and culture of a nation. Most of these
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attract
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people
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interest in them. There are several reasons behind this trend.

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with,
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local
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museums
and historical
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a miss
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new
to them. They are already familiar with their culture and history and perhaps have nothing
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new
to discover by frequenting the same
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museums
again and again. A tourist,
on the other hand
, may enjoy visiting a
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museum
or
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monument
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because
of the numerous windows they open to the past. Another reason that dissuades
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local
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people
from visiting
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museums
is that they are rarely updated. What they showcase this month is in no way
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different
from what they showcased last month or
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last year
.
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places
are quite boring. Cost could
also
be a factor. Most
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museums
and
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monuments
charge an entry fee which could be an issue for low or middle income families.

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government
and
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local
authorities can take several simple steps to rekindle
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locals’
interest in
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museums
. They can,
for example
, organize regular exhibitions, cultural
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events
and light
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shows
that provide visitors a
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new
experience every time they visit these
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places
. Scraping the entry fee may
also
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help
.

To conclude
, if
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local
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people
prefer to stay away from
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museums
and
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monuments
,
that is
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because
these institutions fail to offer
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new
experiences to them. Authorities should consider organizing various cultural
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at these
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to encourage more
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local
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people
to visit them.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6
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