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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.6

The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. with this statement? v. 6
Nowadays, all around is becoming more technical. However, books are converted electronic variant. Some people agree that, in spite of delivery book is a basic function of library management, they would not like to waste of place and money for technical equipments. Others think opposite opinion. In this essay, it will be discussed both views and give examples where relevant. In first place demand for electronic books is increasing, such as computer and internet sources. Because the rate of find the card you are looking for is faster and it is not much required. For example, without computers and internet searching data take our more time and need read tick tone book. In fact that, electronic information can save our expensive time. On the other hand, some people prefer to read real books than electronic for the reason that they want to relax from modern life or same of than think that computers are harmed health especially eyes. For instance, when people regularly use electronics they lose their ability of seeing and irradiated therefor they become serious illnesses like cancer and diseases caused by radiation. So they want as little as possible to apply such kind of base of information like internet, video, DVDs. To sum up, internet sources are useful and comfortable for people who want to find something in a short time period. Real books or data are written on paper are preferred by readers who want to save their health and want to relax. I think that the library should implementation both of information resources in support of cash spend and lack of space.
Nowadays, all around is becoming more technical.
However
,
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books
are converted
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electronic
variant.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
in spite of
delivery
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book
is a basic function of library management, they would not like to waste of place and money for technical equipments. Others
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
opposite opinion. In this essay, it will
be discussed
both views and give examples where relevant.

In
first
place demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is increasing, such as computer and internet sources.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
the rate of find the card you are looking for is faster and it is not much required.
For example
, without computers and internet searching data take our more time and need read tick tone
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
. In fact that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electronic
information can save our expensive time.

On the other hand
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer to read real
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books
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electronic
for the reason that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to relax from modern life or same of than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that computers
are harmed
health
especially
eyes.
For instance
, when
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people
regularly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
electronics they lose their ability of seeing and irradiated therefor they become serious illnesses like cancer and diseases caused by radiation.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
as possible to apply such kind of base of information like internet, video, DVDs.

To sum up, internet sources are useful and comfortable for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to find something in a short time period. Real
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
or data
are written
on paper
are preferred
by readers who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to save their health and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to relax. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the library should implementation both of information resources in support of cash spend and lack of space.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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