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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.22

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 22
The changing climate reveals a threat to life and has caused some severe impact in some aspects. Although some people argue that we should live with the current situation of the climate without trying to change or prevent the worse to be happening. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this argument because I believe that we still have time and can take actions to prevent or reduce human impact on the Earth’s climate. There are several things that government and individuals could take to eliminate or at least reduce the effects to make the climate worse. The government could encourage people to decrease their use of those products might harm the oxygen layer such as the hair spray. They could also make some regulations or restrictions for the company and the industry which help to reduce the carbon dioxide emissions and encourage the green house building by providing them subsidies. When it comes to individuals, we should try to stop wasting unnecessarily energies and control the amount when we use them. For examples, we can take public transport instead of driving to reduce the emissions of carbon dioxides. Also, by saving energies, we could turn off the lights can recycle the waste property. On the other hand, if we simply try to live with the current state, there might be some serious subsequences coming in the near future. Scientist had warned us that the oxygens was keep damaging and if we do not aware of it, it might cause severe impact on either our earth or ourselves. There are some examples and reasons, according to the researches and what they have found. Firstly, the increasing ocean lines have covered some of the small islands so the habitants had been forced to leave or move. Secondly, the global warming keeps the iceberg melting and a lot of animals, especially in the Arctic area such as North polar bears and some types of penguins are facing the extinctions because of the ultimate climate. In conclusion, from the reasons above, I strongly disagree with the thoughts of living with the existing climate change and avoiding to take actions or plans to prevent it. Instead, we should be more aware and care about the Earth that we live in and do our best to protect the climate because all of these issues relate to us maybe not now but in the near future.
The changing
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climate
reveals a threat to life and has caused
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some
severe impact in
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some
aspects. Although
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some
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people
argue that we should
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live
with the
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current
situation of the
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climate
without trying to
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change
or
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prevent
the worse to be happening. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this argument
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because
I believe that we
still
have time and can take actions to
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prevent
or
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reduce
human impact on the Earth’s climate.

There are several things that
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government
and individuals could take to eliminate or at least
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reduce
the effects to
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make
the
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climate
worse. The
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government
could encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to decrease their
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use
of those products might harm the oxygen layer such as the hair spray. They could
also
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make
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some
regulations or restrictions for the
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company
and the industry which
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help
to
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reduce
the carbon dioxide emissions and encourage the green
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house
building by providing them subsidies. When it
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comes
to individuals, we should try to
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stop
wasting
unnecessarily
energies and control the amount when we
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use
them. For examples, we can take public transport
instead
of driving to
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reduce
the emissions of carbon dioxides.
Also
, by saving energies, we could turn off the lights can recycle the waste property.

On the other hand
, if we
simply
try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
state, there might be
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some
serious subsequences coming in the near future. Scientist had warned us that the
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oxygens
was
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keep
damaging and if we do not aware of it, it might cause severe impact on either our earth or ourselves. There are
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some
examples and reasons, according to the researches and what they have found.
Firstly
, the increasing ocean lines have covered
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some of the
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small
islands
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so
the habitants had
been forced
to
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leave
or
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move
.
Secondly
, the global warming
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keeps
the iceberg melting and
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a lot of
animals,
especially
in the Arctic area such as North polar bears and
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some
types of penguins are facing the extinctions
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because
of the ultimate climate.

In conclusion
, from the reasons above, I
strongly
disagree with the thoughts of living with the existing
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climate
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change
and
The verb 'avoiding' is used with the gerund form: "avoiding taking".
avoiding to take
actions or plans to
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prevent
it.
Instead
, we should be more aware and care about the Earth that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in and do our best to protect the
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climate
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because
all of these issues relate to us maybe not
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now
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but
in the near future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
400 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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