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some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 4
At the present time, transportation and traffic jam are a very annoying problem not only in the third world countries but also in many developed nations. A group of people have started to believe that in order to solve the issue, people should be encouraged to live in the countryside or in the suburbs instead of cities. I slightly agree with the point as moving some people out of the main city will certainly reduce some of the traffic jam but there are other issues as well. It is not possible to solve the problem completely by only relocating people. This essay will discuss the problems and my views in this regard in great details. Global population is increasing day by day and as a result, we are facing a major transportation problem. As we have to move millions of people to their desired places, traffic jam has become a regular thing in our daily life. Because of this issue, people are losing a valuable time of their work every day. So, many people are suggesting that in order to solve the problem we need to encourage people to live in the countryside. If they do this, then the population of the city will decrease which will result in the reduction of traffic jam. Although, implementing the idea can reduce the traffic jam slightly, it will not solve the issue completely. As the research suggests, that 70% of the traffic jam are happening because of the unplanned city roads, we need to redesign our whole planning. To summarize, it is evident that by doing only relocation of people we cannot get rid of the problem completely. In order to eradicate the issue for good, we need to revise our planning and act accordingly.
At the present time, transportation and
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traffic
jam are a
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very
annoying
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problem
not
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only
in the third world countries
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but
also
in
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many
developed nations. A group of
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people
have
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started
to believe that in order to
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solve
the
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issue
,
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people
should
be encouraged
to
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live
in the countryside or in the suburbs
instead
of
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cities
. I
slightly
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agree
with the point as moving
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some
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people
out of the main city will
certainly
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reduce
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some of the
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traffic
jam
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but
there are other
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issues
as well
. It is not possible to
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solve
the
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problem
completely by
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only
relocating
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people
. This essay will discuss the
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problems
and my views in this regard in great
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details
.

Global population is increasing day by day and
as a result
, we are facing a major transportation
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problem
. As we
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have to
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move
millions of
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people
to their desired places,
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traffic
jam has become a regular thing in our daily life.
Because of this
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issue
,
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people
are losing a valuable time of their work every day.

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So
,
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many
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people
are suggesting that in order to
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solve
the
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problem
we need to encourage
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people
to
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live
in the countryside. If they do this, then the population of the city will decrease which will result in the reduction of
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traffic
jam. Although, implementing the
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idea
can
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reduce
the
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traffic
jam
slightly
, it will not
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solve
the
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issue
completely. As the research suggests, that 70% of the
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traffic
jam are happening
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because
of the unplanned city roads, we need to redesign our whole planning.

To summarize
, it is evident that by doing
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only
relocation of
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people
we cannot
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get
rid of the
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problem
completely. In order to eradicate the
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issue
for
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good
, we need to revise our planning and act
accordingly
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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