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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 2
In todays world, One of the major issues faced by the entire world is about traffic, pollution and transportation. With the increase in the number of vehicles and more of human staying in the main area of their locality. The usage of the driving tools is increasing drastically. So few people believe, if some percentage of the human shift to another part of the locality, like outer side of the state. It would be helpful in minimizing the issue. I shall be discussing on the same in the following paragraph. To begin with, The major reason of increasing the above mentioned issue is, Mankind takes things for granted and they fail to understand the problems which can be arises because of their actions. For instance, When human starts to crowd a locality with the thought of having quick access to services. Like Hospitals, College, Office, Malls and Markets. However they forget that there is a limited space available in the major parts of the state and due to over the human population road becomes narrower and the human having quick accessibility to services they use their own vehicle rather than public modes and eventually it leads to increase in traffic and transportation issue. On the other hand, If mankind starts to live in town or on the outer side of the locality, They will be using more of general travelling modes as using own mode of travel will be expensive. And they will be enjoying the beautiful mother nature. To conclude, I strongly suggest to the human to start living in the outskirts which will help them and the environment together.
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world, One of the major issues faced by the entire world is about traffic, pollution and transportation. With the increase in the number of vehicles and more of
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human
staying in the main area of their locality. The usage of the driving tools is increasing
drastically
.
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few
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people
believe, if
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percentage of the
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shift to another part of the locality, like outer side of the state. It would be helpful in minimizing the issue. I shall be discussing on the same in the following paragraph.

To
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begin
with, The major reason of increasing the above mentioned issue is, Mankind takes things for
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granted and
they fail to understand the problems which can be
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arises
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because
of their actions.
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, When
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human
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starts
to crowd a locality with the
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thought
of having quick access to services. Like Hospitals, College, Office, Malls and Markets.
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However
they forget that there is a limited space available in the major parts of the state and due to over the
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human
population road becomes narrower and the
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human
having quick accessibility to services they
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use
their
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own
vehicle
rather
than public modes and
eventually
it leads to increase in traffic and transportation issue.

On the other hand
, If mankind
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starts
to
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live
in town or on the outer side of the locality, They will be using more of general travelling modes as using
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own
mode of travel will be expensive. And they will be enjoying the
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beautiful
mother nature.

To conclude
, I
strongly
suggest to the
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human
to
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start
living in the outskirts which will
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help
them and the environment together.
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IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
271 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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