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Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view. Why or why not? v.2

Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view. Why or why not? v. 2
In this incessant world of development, psychological evolutions, discoveries, mankind often witness a dilemma. A dilemma which brings the human beings to decide what is more apt and what' s not. Making a decision for mankind by the men doesn' t give a sweet pie everytime. We all are a part of this very race to make a better decision for the people and the surrounding we reside in. This has been going on from the beginning of human civilization. As we grew as social beings, our demands started covering broader aspects and we started taking the nature' s beautiful gifts trivial. However, these demands were also taken in hand as a pragmatic way for evolution. Little did we knew that what blunders would be made by the men in order to fulfill it' s demand. For occurrence of human beings for a safe and sound lifestyle, proper spacing and infrastructure had to brought. As it isn' t possible to spend a healthy lifespan yet alone in a forest without shelter, proper storage of food and water. The need for proper manufacturer of goods was reached and this was met by industrialization. All of this demanded deforestation of large hectares of forests to bring land into profitable uses for humans. Development took its way to flourish and mark the definition of a country as an ideal one. Meanwhile, the other innocent organisms lost their habitats to human greed. Displaced by these enormous changes, the earth saw the decline of flora and fauna. Adding to this, the biodiversity and ecological balance has been profoundly dissociated. There have been instances of many animals getting extinct like dodo, the asiatic cheetah. A lot of animals and plants make their entry to the red book, the book of endangered, vulnerable and rare species. If the negative external factors continue destruction, our motive to have sustainable development will not ever be achieved. To recapitulate, future is unprecedented but we can always try to make it worth living. Every organism on this earth has its own place and we need to embrace the biodiversity that we know. Keeping this in mind, one more thing can justify this, said by the great mahatma gandhi, " there is enough for everyone' s need but not for their greed. "
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often
witness a dilemma. A dilemma which brings the
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human
beings to decide
what is more
apt and
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what&
#039; s not. Making a decision for mankind by the
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men
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everytime
. We all are a part of this
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very
race to
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make
a better decision for the
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people
and the surrounding we reside in.

This has been going on from the beginning of
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human
civilization. As we grew as social beings, our demands
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started
covering broader
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aspects and
we
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started
taking the
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nature&
#039; s
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beautiful
gifts trivial.
However
, these demands were
also
taken in hand as a pragmatic way for evolution.
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Little
did we knew that what blunders would
be made
by the
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men
in order to fulfill
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it&
#039; s demand. For occurrence of
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human
beings for a safe and sound lifestyle, proper spacing and infrastructure had
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to brought
. As it
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isn&
#039; t possible to spend a healthy lifespan
yet
alone in a forest without shelter, proper storage of food and water. The need for proper manufacturer of
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goods
was reached
and this
was met
by industrialization. All of this demanded deforestation of large hectares of forests to bring land into profitable
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uses
for
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humans
. Development took its way to flourish and mark the definition of a country as an ideal one. Meanwhile, the other innocent organisms lost their habitats to
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human
greed. Displaced by these enormous
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changes
, the earth
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saw
the decline of flora and fauna. Adding to this, the biodiversity and ecological balance has been
profoundly
dissociated. There have been instances of
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many
animals getting extinct like dodo, the
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asiatic
cheetah.
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A lot of
animals and plants
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make
their entry to the red book, the book of endangered, vulnerable and rare species. If the
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negative
external factors continue destruction, our motive to have sustainable development will not ever
be achieved
.

To recapitulate, future
is unprecedented
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but
we can always try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it worth living. Every organism on this earth has its
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own
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
place and
we need to embrace the biodiversity that we know. Keeping this in mind, one more thing can justify this, said by the great mahatma
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gandhi
,
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&quot
; there is
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enough
for
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everyone&
#039; s need
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but
not for their greed.
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&quot
;
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IELTS essay Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view. Why or why not? v. 2

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