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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.7

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 7
It is indeed difficult to comprehend that which life has more right to use planet earth, however all the lives has equal right to breath and live. The fact cannot be denied that humans are most sensible creation of god, who can develop and maintain their surrounding impeccably. On the other hand animals are least comparable with humans and that’s why animals are adopted as pet by human but humans are not adopted by animals. Human has myriad reasons for using land with several motives. Today, human has progressed in all the field from invention of organic edibles to technology. May be due to humans these efforts current world can be deemed as advanced planet with enormous luxurious for all living being like human has constructed various sanctuaries to provide home to various animals, as well as he is protecting him by providing adequate living environment and veterinary care. Many marine life protection program are designed to protect marine lives. Human has not invented measures for his facilities as well as for animals, like many endangered animals are imported or exported to other countries with the goal of increasing their numbers by breeding them. Human has used land to build home for himself and for animals. On the other hand, if animals would have been leading this world, than world might be so developed alike it is today. Human is reckoned as king of the planet, Earth. He has earned this title by toiling hard. Species of Dinosaurs are not seen today, the reason of their extinction are inexplicable – many Dinosaurs were eaten by their own species, so other died due to natural calamities. Similarly human has faced many predicament to save their lives. But humans with their brilliant brain invented the solution for their problem to protect himself from the nature’s challenges such as pre – predication of weather or storms. Also he is feeding the whole community of humans by cultivating farms and trying to provide them with various variety of healthy food. In fact human has arranged nutrient food for animals like dog’s and cat’s food. To drive this rapidly developing world human has constructed many industries, corporate companies, universities, hospitals, Zoos, dog house, this list do not end anywhere. Humans these effort has served all lives to live with utmost safety also provided opportunities of growth. Human is trying to make best possible use of his planet. Although in the mist of developing earth human has invited various problems such as pollution and stressful life of competition but he is trying to resolve such issues. If human have not used these land for farming, industry and building home and relied on somebody else for their lives than probably this social animal would have also extinct. Therefore humans can be entitled as “responsible animal to save all other animals”
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indeed
difficult to comprehend that which life has more right to
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use
planet earth,
however
all the
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lives
has equal right to breath and
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live
. The fact cannot
be denied
that
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humans
are
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most
sensible creation of god, who can develop and maintain their surrounding
impeccably
. On the
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other
hand
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animals
are least comparable with
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humans
and that’s why
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animals
are adopted
as pet by
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human
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but
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humans
are not adopted by
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animals
.
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Human
has myriad reasons for using land with several motives.

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Today
,
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human
has progressed in all the field from invention of organic edibles to technology. May be due to
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humans
these efforts
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current
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world
can
be deemed
as advanced planet with enormous luxurious for all living being like
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human
has constructed
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various
sanctuaries to provide home to
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various
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animals
,
as well
as he is protecting him by providing adequate living environment and veterinary care.
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Many
marine life protection program
are designed
to protect marine
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lives
.
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Human
has not invented measures for his facilities
as well
as for
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animals
, like
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many
endangered
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animals
are imported
or exported to
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other
countries with the goal of increasing their numbers by breeding them.
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Human
has
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used
land to build home for himself and for
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animals
. On the
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other
hand, if
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animals
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would have been
leading this
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world
, than
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world
might be
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so
developed alike it is
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today
.

Human
is reckoned
as king of the planet, Earth. He has earned this title by toiling
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hard
. Species of Dinosaurs are not
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seen
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today
, the reason of their extinction are inexplicable
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–
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many
Dinosaurs
were eaten
by their
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own
species,
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so
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other
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died
due to natural calamities.
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Similarly
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human
has faced
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many predicament
to save their
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lives
.
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But
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humans
with their brilliant brain invented the solution for their problem to protect himself from the nature’s challenges such as
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pre
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–
predication of weather or storms.
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Also
he is feeding the whole community of
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humans
by cultivating farms and trying to provide them with
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various
variety of healthy food. In fact
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human
has arranged nutrient food for
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animals
like dog’s and cat’s food. To drive this
rapidly
developing
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world
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human
has constructed
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many
industries, corporate
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companies
, universities, hospitals, Zoos, dog
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house
, this list do not
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end
anywhere.
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Humans
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these effort
has served all
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lives
to
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live
with utmost safety
also
provided opportunities of growth.
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Human
is trying to
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make best
possible
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use
of his planet.

Although in the mist of developing earth
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human
has invited
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various
problems such as pollution and stressful life of competition
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but
he is trying to resolve such issues. If
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human
have not
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used
these land for farming, industry and building home and relied on somebody else for their
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lives
than
probably
this social
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animal
would have
also
extinct.
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Therefore
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humans
can
be entitled
as “responsible
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animal
to save all
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other
animals
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
”
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
472 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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