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Most people accept that we are now living in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation is a positive or negative development? v.2

Most people accept that we are now living in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. v. 2
As the time is passing, our world is becoming more and more globalised. Every country is developing to their full extent. Globalisation is process of integrating countries with each other. Globalisation is a process of connecting each country with one another. It is the key that has the ability to unlock every mystery in technological development. It is the only method by which countries communicate with each other and traditions and cultures are passed. The developed countries have the technology that can be shared to other countries. Therefore, it can be said that globalisation is advantageous to us in many ways. It is the reason that everything is just a doorstep away from us. We can get anything we want and all the information of the world is available to us in our hands. It also has helped many countries to come out of their shells and race towards a better world. India is one of the countries who has flourished a lot because of globalisation. Many different companies have settled here which has created a lot of job opportunities for youths. Globalisation is one of the main reason in increasing the literacy rate of countries. It has made the countries independent and has achieved the unachievable. It has bonded each country with one another, disintegrating the concept of superpower. Some may suggest that globalisation is disadvantageous for us. Globalisation has led to erasing the boundary between different countries culture. It also has led to mixing of different cultures between countries. This has created a lot of distress in people. They think that their heritage will get ruined by this and everything will lose its importance. People think that it also has made rich countries richer and poor countries poorer. I don’t think I will agree with the opinion that globalisation is disadvantageous to us. It has a plethora of advantages. Globalisation is the protagonist in today’s world. It has led us to where we are now. It has made many things available to us like: travelling in mid-air, exploring the deep sea waters, cooking in space and many other things. It has also made us capable of exploring the deep secrets of space. Many countries are even trying to conquer the universe. India has also taken a step into that race by sending it’s spaceship to the moon, “CHANDRAYAN-II”. This shows the competition between countries. This feeling of competition is advantageous to citizens of different countries. In the broader aspect, it can be said that globalisation has made the world better place for us to live. It is the sole reason which has made our future shine brighter than ever before.
As the time is passing, our
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world
is becoming more and more
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globalised
. Every
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country
is developing to their full extent.
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Globalisation
is process of integrating
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countries
with each other.

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Globalisation
is a process of connecting each
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country
with one another. It is the key that has the ability to unlock every mystery in technological development. It is the
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only
method by which
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countries
communicate with each other and traditions and cultures
are passed
. The developed
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countries
have the technology that can
be shared
to other
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countries
.
Therefore
, it can
be said
that
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globalisation
is advantageous to us in
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many
ways. It is the reason that everything is
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just
a doorstep away from us. We can
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get
anything we want and all the information of the
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world
is available to us in our hands. It
also
has
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helped
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many
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countries
to
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come
out of their shells and race towards a better
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world
. India is one of the
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countries
who
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has
flourished a lot
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because
of
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globalisation
.
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Many
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different
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companies
have settled here which has created
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a lot of
job opportunities for youths.
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Globalisation
is one of the main reason in increasing the literacy rate of
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countries
. It has made the
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countries
independent and has achieved the unachievable. It has bonded each
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country
with one another, disintegrating the concept of superpower.

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Some
may
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suggest
that
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globalisation
is disadvantageous for us.
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Globalisation
has led to erasing the boundary between
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different
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countries
culture. It
also
has led to mixing of
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different
cultures between
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countries
. This has created
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a lot of
distress in
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people
. They
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think
that their heritage will
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get
ruined by this and everything will lose its importance.
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People
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think
that it
also
has made rich
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countries
richer and poor
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countries
poorer.

I don’t
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think
I will
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agree
with the opinion that
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globalisation
is disadvantageous to us. It has a plethora of advantages.
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Globalisation
is the protagonist in
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today
’s
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world
. It has led us to where we are
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now
. It has made
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many
things available to us like: travelling in mid-air, exploring the deep sea waters, cooking in space and
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many
other things.
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It
has
also
made us capable of exploring the deep secrets of space.
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Many
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countries
are even trying to conquer the universe. India has
also
taken a step into that race by sending
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it’s
spaceship to the moon, “
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CHANDRAYAN-II
”. This
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shows
the competition between
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countries
. This feeling of competition is advantageous to citizens of
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different
countries.

In the broader aspect, it can
be said
that
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globalisation
has made the
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world
better place for us to
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live
. It is the sole reason which has made our future shine brighter than ever
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before
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Most people accept that we are now living in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
442 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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