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Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view. Why or why not? v.1

Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view. Why or why not? v. 1
Language is the important means to communicate with another person. When a person immigrates to a country with a different language, he or she might not know the language. But this does not cause any serious impact socially or practically, as the people can manage to learn the language. When a person moves to a country for work, it might be an arduous task to understand the language. As a result, it may seem like he is not efficient as he will not be able to express his ideas properly. However, this can be overcome easily when they start learning the native language of the place. If they learn the language, they can converse with the citizens which can improve their social life. In a recent survey conducted by the "E-life" magazine shows that around 60% of the immigrant population of Japan started learning Japanese and 50% of them had started speaking it, which helped them to have Japanese friends. In addiction to this, native citizens as well as the immigrants will have an opportunity to learn about different cultures. One more point worth considering is that people learn at a faster rate when they are in the country itself. Although, they can survive with universally accepted language, English. We can find a small number of English speakers even in countries like China, Japan and Russia. In conclusion, the immigrants can live in a country where they do not know the native language as they can survive even with English. However, some may invest time in learning the language in order to make some friends in that country.
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people
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moves
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country
for work, it might be an arduous task to understand the
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language
.
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ideas
properly
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be overcome
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when they
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start
learning the native
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language
of the place. If they
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learn
the
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, they can converse with the citizens which can
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improve
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that around 60% of the immigrant population of Japan
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learning Japanese and 50% of them had
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them to have Japanese friends.

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learn
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different
cultures. One more point worth considering is that
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at a faster rate when they are in the
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itself. Although, they can survive with
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accepted
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language
, English. We can find a
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small
number of English speakers even in
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countries
like China, Japan and Russia.

In conclusion
, the immigrants can
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live
in a
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country
where they do not know the native
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language
as they can survive even with English.
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,
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IELTS essay Some people think that human needs for farmlands, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. with this point of view. Why or why not? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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