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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reason or example to support your opinion. v.2

that modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reason or example to support your opinion. v. 2
Modern Technology has provided human better world to live in. And easy availability of technologies globally have brought the world together. Technology has now become like a change that cannot be inevitable. Likewise today people cannot imagine their life without the use of technology. The best part of technology is not limited to one or two people, a single technology is used my numerous countries, and citizens of it. Therefore, I concur that modern technology is magnificently creating a single world culture. Technology has evolved as global phenomena. Every country of the world want to top this sector. It is most powerful weapon of today’s world. Why it is powerful? Because it is widely accepted by the people of the world. Technology has become inevitable today, it is bound to grow and make others grow. For an Instance – Solar energy use was initiated by America and now is adopted by many countries. It has allowed many countries to use same technology to save revertible natural resources. Fortunately, it is generating healthy competition by prompting this world to fallow one culture - “Use of Technology “. Technology has spread awareness in the people and united them together. One countries invention or discovery is used by many others for the betterment. This cooperative use of technology is spreading awareness about diverse technologies in the world and collaborating the world. For an instance – Since World War – 2, Russia and United State of America were sharing rivalry term. But invention of Nuclear power has bought these countries together to enhance the research of Nuclear power. Similarly many developing – countries, in which education rate is low. Technology is playing a role of teacher for an instance – Smart phones (I – Phone ) is invented by American company Apple but allows people from entire globe to operate it efficiently without any pre – information. I am comfortably able to talk to my brother through facetime (video call app of I - phone) being in America also. Technology is inviting everybody to be benefited by it. Distinct countries of the world are fighting in order to proclaim their cultures and belief better than others. And these wars are costing them numerous live and immense amount of resources. But culture of fallowing same technology is wholly benefiting this world. Therefore I believe that modern technology’s producing single world culture is better than war waging cultures.
Modern
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Technology
has provided human better
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world
to
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live
in. And easy availability of
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technologies
globally have brought the
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world
together.
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Technology
has
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now
become like a
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change
that cannot be inevitable.
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Likewise
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today
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people
cannot imagine their life without the
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use
of
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technology
. The best part of
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technology
is not limited to one or two
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people
, a single
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technology
is
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used
my numerous
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countries
, and citizens of it.
Therefore
, I concur that modern
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technology
is
magnificently
creating a single
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world
culture.

Technology has evolved as global phenomena. Every
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country
of the
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world
want to top this sector. It is
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most
powerful weapon of
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today
’s
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world
. Why it is powerful?
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Because
it is
widely
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accepted
by the
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people
of the
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world
.
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Technology
has become inevitable
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today
, it
is bound
to grow and
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make
others grow. For an Instance
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–
Solar energy
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use
was initiated
by America and
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now
is adopted
by
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many
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countries
. It has
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allowed
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many
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countries
to
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use
same
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technology
to save revertible natural resources.
Fortunately
, it is generating healthy competition by prompting this
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world
to fallow one
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culture
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-
“
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Use
of
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Technology
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“. Technology
has spread awareness in the
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people
and united them together. One
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countries
invention or discovery is
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used
by
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many
others for the betterment. This cooperative
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use
of
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technology
is spreading awareness about diverse
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technologies
in the
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world
and collaborating the
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world
. For an instance
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–
Since
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World
War
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2, Russia and United State of America were sharing rivalry term.
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But
invention of Nuclear power has
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bought
these
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countries
together to enhance the research of Nuclear power.
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Similarly
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many
developing
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–
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countries
, in which education rate is low.
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Technology
is playing a role of teacher for an instance
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–
Smart phones (I
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–
Phone
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)
is invented
by American
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company
Apple
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but
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allows
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people
from entire globe to operate it
efficiently
without any
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pre
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–
information. I am
comfortably
able to talk to my brother through
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facetime
(video call app of I
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-
phone) being in America
also
.
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Technology
is inviting everybody to
be benefited
by it.

Distinct
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countries
of the
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world
are fighting in order to proclaim their
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cultures
and belief better than others. And these wars are costing them numerous
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live
and immense amount of resources.
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But
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culture
of fallowing same
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technology
is wholly benefiting this
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world
.
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Therefore
I believe that modern
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technology’s
producing single
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world
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culture
is better than war waging
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cultures
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes
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IELTS essay that modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reason or example to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
402 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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