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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. v.5

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. v. 5
Ever increasing demands of mankind have strained the existing resources our mother nature has. For this elevated demands for farmland, housing & industry using the land traditionally reserved for forests is an easy, logical and cheap option for many. However, in my opinion encroaching the jungles will be more expensive and can be fatal if not stopped. We will see the ecological & economical impacts it is having on humanity in this essay. Grabbing the forests is no less than attacking the homes of the wild animals, many of which are endangered species. This insane deforestation has detrimental impacts on our already fragile ecosystem. The major impact of fewer trees is high pollution as there are significantly fewer trees to absorb the CO2 and breathe out Oxygen. This has multitudes of consequences like global warming and erratic weather patterns, which is making the planet inhabitable by day. The result could be fatal and probably irreversible if deforestation is not controlled or stopped, and could be very costly for humanity. The existence of many endangered animals is a litmus test for the health of the environment. For example, tiger being the topmost animal in food-chain, healthy number of tigers show all other parts in an ecosystem are working fine. Also, many endemic species are already vanished from the face of the earth due to loss of niche habitats. We do not have anything but pictures to see these beautiful animals and birds. If this deforestation is not stopped we will not have anything but only captured memories of our companions on earth to show to our future generations. To conclude, the unthoughtful encroachment on forest land, home of many endangered animals, should be stopped. Otherwise, the effects will of it will be fatal and probably irreversible.
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Ever increasing
demands of mankind have strained the existing resources our mother nature has. For this elevated demands for farmland, housing & industry using the land
traditionally
reserved for forests is an easy, logical and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
option for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
.
However
, in my opinion encroaching the jungles will be more expensive and can be fatal if not
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stopped
. We will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the ecological & economical impacts it is having on humanity in this essay.

Grabbing the forests is no less than attacking the homes of the wild
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animals
,
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many
of which
are endangered
species. This insane deforestation has detrimental impacts on our already fragile ecosystem. The major impact of fewer trees is high pollution as there are
significantly
fewer trees to absorb the CO2 and breathe out Oxygen. This has multitudes of
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consequences like
global warming and erratic weather patterns, which is making the planet inhabitable by day. The result could be fatal and
probably
irreversible if deforestation is not controlled or
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stopped
, and could be
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very
costly for humanity.

The existence of
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many
endangered
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animals
is a litmus
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test
for the health of the environment.
For example
, tiger being the topmost
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animal
in food-chain, healthy number of tigers
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show
all other parts in an ecosystem are working fine.
Also
,
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many
endemic species are already vanished from the face of the earth due to loss of niche habitats. We do not have anything
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but
pictures to
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see
these
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beautiful
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animals
and birds. If this deforestation is not
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stopped
we will not have anything
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but
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only
captured memories of our companions on earth to
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show
to our future generations.

To conclude
, the
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unthoughtful
encroachment on forest land, home of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
endangered
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animals
, should be
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stopped
.
Otherwise
, the effects will of it will be fatal and
probably
irreversible.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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