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Some people think that governments should invest more in public services instead of wasting money on arts such as music and paintings. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people think that governments should invest more in public services instead of wasting money on arts such as music and paintings. v. 5
It is irrefutable that governments has no such planning for investment. Some individuals are of the opinion that government has good in providing public services whereas others opine that they are not. It is necessary to look at both arguments before forming an opinion. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss the reason. In my opinion, government should have more focuses on providing better services to their citizens which are not seeing in many places. Moreover, government has invested mammoth money for advertising their schemes what they did and what they will do rather than increase public services like public transportation, public security, education etc. People depends on government services which affects their daily life, their daily routines. For example, a person who is going to office, five days in a week, have fixed timing but because of delay in bus or local train will affect to reaching on time and because of that sometime his/her managers shouted on him. On the other hand, other than public services lots of things which also government has to do for development perspective. There is no issue to investing money on arts like music, painting, gardening. Without any doubt, these things are also played a vital role for increasing economy of our county. People all over the world, has come in our country for investing money on different type of arts like in making movies which helps to improve our economy. In conclusion, public services and arts both are necessary for the country development and for that government has to invest on them. But providing best services to their people has always first priority of the government and investing more money for that.
It is irrefutable that
governments
has no such planning for investment.
Some
individuals are of the opinion that
government
has
good in providing
public
services
whereas others opine that they are not. It is necessary to look at both arguments
before
forming an opinion. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss the reason.

In my opinion,
government
should have more focuses on providing better
services
to their citizens which are not seeing in
many
places.
Moreover
,
government
has invested mammoth
money
for advertising their schemes what they did and what they will do
rather
than increase
public
services
like
public
transportation,
public
security, education etc.
People
depends
on
government
services
which affects their daily life, their daily routines.
For example
, a person who is going to office, five days in a week, have
fixed
timing
but
because
of delay in bus or local train will affect to reaching on time and
because
of that sometime his/her managers shouted on him.

On the other hand
, other than
public
services
lots of things which
also
government
has to
do for development perspective. There is no issue to investing
money
on arts like music, painting, gardening. Without any doubt, these things are
also
played a vital role for increasing economy of our county.
People
all over the world, has
come in
our country for investing
money
on
different
type of arts like in making movies which
helps
to
improve
our economy.

In conclusion
,
public
services
and arts both are necessary for the country development and for that
government
has to
invest on them.
But
providing best
services
to their
people
has
always
first
priority of the
government
and investing more
money
for that.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that governments should invest more in public services instead of wasting money on arts such as music and paintings. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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