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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.11

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources 11
There are a rich variety of art styles all across the world and they represent the history of each nation in various ways. People have different views on the issue of devoting an amount of money to the artists by governments as opposed to private resources, I believe that artists should be supported financially by the governments. There are some persuasive arguments in favor of the governments' financial support. It is believed that different types of arts are the national identity for nations and it is a way to introduce the culture and customs of the host country to other countries in the world. A salient example of this is London, that supports its artists financially and they earn a large amount of money by exporting their pieces of art to other parts of the globe as well as holding musical concerts which could boost the economy of the country up to 30% in 2008. Furthermore, artists have no particular resource for income and consequently they need the support of governments in order to access prosperity and become renowned among people. I believe that if artists have no anxiety and stress for making a living they would be more motivated to focus on their work and create fabulous pieces of art and it would bring fame and money for them in the future. On the other hand, there are some strong arguments against this issue. Some people assert that government should spend money on more important schemes such as health, education and social welfare that enhance the quality of people' s life and it is not targeted only a specific group of residents, so the average quality of life will improve and poverty will be eradicated and a majority of residents of urban and rural areas will be pulled out of poverty. Moreover, there are affluent funding buddies who are interested in investing money on art and they are enthusiastic to support artists by running exhibitions or purchasing their pieces of arts. In conclusion, not only governments but also the rich people should support the artists, it is futuristic and wise to help them since they make the future of nations and they can be a good source of income for governments in the future.
There are a rich variety of
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art
styles all across the
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world and
they represent the history of each nation in various ways.
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People
have
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different
views on the issue of devoting an amount of
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money
to the
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artists
by
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governments
as opposed to private resources, I believe that
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artists
should
be supported
financially
by the
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governments
.

There are
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some
persuasive arguments in favor of the
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governments&
#039; financial
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support
. It
is believed
that
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different
types of
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arts
are the national identity for nations and it is a way to introduce the culture and customs of the host country to other countries in the world. A salient example of this is London, that
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supports
its
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artists
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financially and
they earn a large amount of
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money
by exporting their pieces of
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art
to other parts of the globe
as well
as holding musical concerts which could boost the economy of the country up to 30% in 2008.
Furthermore
,
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artists
have no particular resource for income and
consequently
they need the
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support
of
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governments
in order to access prosperity and become renowned among
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people
. I believe that if
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artists
have no anxiety and
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stress
for making a living they would be more motivated to focus on their work and create fabulous pieces of
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art
and it would bring fame and
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money
for them in the future.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
strong arguments against this issue.
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Some
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people
assert that
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government
should spend
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money
on more
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important
schemes such as health, education and social welfare that enhance the quality of
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people&
#039; s life and it is not targeted
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only
a specific group of residents,
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so
the average quality of life will
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improve
and poverty will
be eradicated
and a majority of residents of urban and rural areas will
be pulled
out of poverty.
Moreover
, there are affluent funding buddies who
are interested
in investing
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money
on
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art and
they are enthusiastic to
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support
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artists
by running exhibitions or purchasing their pieces of arts.

In conclusion
, not
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only
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governments
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but
also
the rich
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people
should
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support
the
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artists
, it is futuristic and wise to
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help
them since they
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make
the future of
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nations and
they can be a
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good
source of income for
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governments
in the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
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