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Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich v.5

Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich v. 5
These days, dynamics of world have changed. It has become a global village and interaction between different people is becoming more easier day by day. Furthermore, there has always been parity in resources amongst different countries. Some nations are poor and few are rich. This essay will discuss the responsibilities of poorer nations and role wealthy countries can play to ease out the pressure and balance it. Different states have wide range of responsibilities to fulfil. However, they tend to succeed in few and fail in some, but reason for their failure could be lack of resources on their disposal. All around the globe, taking care of basic needs is responsibility of a nation, whether it is poor or wealthy. However, on numerous occasions, different nations have failed to take care basic of necessities. Moreover, few countries try to take care of this matter by taking grants from different organisations across the globe, such as: World Health Organisation (WHO), UNICEF, UNO and etc. Furthermore, World Bank and Asian Development Bank, have also been seen playing major role, in order to overcome these problems. While on the other hand, wealthy nations also have an important role to play and on various instances, it has been noted that they have played their role and performed their responsibilities in a great manner. We have seen nations, that have ample resources to provide jobs to people of poor nation and moreover, they have also helped to overcome issues of basic necessities. Furthermore, we have nations such as: Saudi Arabia, Japan, USA and etc, to be part of donor plans of various human rights organisations. In conclusion, it can be easily said that ' yes' , looking after citizen is responsibility of every nation whether they are poor or rich, but if a country is wealthier in terms of resources and have idle resources, than they should be used to help poor countries, to overcome issues.
These days, dynamics of world have
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changed
. It has become a global village and interaction between
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different
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people
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is
becoming
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more easier
day by day.
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, there has always been parity in resources amongst
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different
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countries
.
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Some
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nations
are
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poor
and few are rich. This essay will discuss the
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responsibilities
of poorer
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nations
and
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role
wealthy
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countries
can play to
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ease
out the pressure and balance it.

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Different
states have wide range of
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responsibilities
to fulfil.
However
, they tend to succeed in few and fail in
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some
,
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but
reason for their failure could be lack of resources on their disposal. All around the globe, taking care of basic needs is
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responsibility
of a
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nation
, whether it is
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poor
or wealthy.
However
, on numerous occasions,
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different
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nations
have failed to take care basic of necessities.
Moreover
, few
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countries
try to take care of this matter by taking grants from
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different
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organisations
across the globe, such as: World Health
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Organisation
(WHO), UNICEF, UNO
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and etc
.
Furthermore
, World Bank and Asian Development Bank, have
also
been
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seen
playing major
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role
, in order to overcome these problems.

While
on the other hand
, wealthy
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nations
also
have an
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important
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role
to play and on various instances, it has
been noted
that they have played their
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role
and performed their
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responsibilities
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in a great manner
. We have
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seen
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nations
, that have ample resources to provide jobs to
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people
of
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poor
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nation
and
moreover
, they have
also
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helped
to overcome issues of
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basic necessities
.
Furthermore
, we have
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nations
such as: Saudi Arabia, Japan, USA
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and etc
, to be part of donor plans of various human rights
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organisations
.

In conclusion
, it can be
easily
said that '
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,
looking after citizen is
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responsibility
of every
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nation
whether they are
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poor
or rich,
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but
if a
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country
is wealthier in terms of resources and have idle resources, than they should be
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used
to
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help
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poor
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countries
, to overcome issues.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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