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Some people think that government should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities v.2

Some people think that government should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities v. 2
People have different views about spending money on a budget of its government. While it is argued that a government should invest on speed forms of public transport, I support the idea that the money of government should be used on other importance. There are two main reasons why a government should not invest into speed transportation. Firstly, it is not suitable for almost road systems, especially in many nations have the narrow road systems and have not private lane for the public transport. Thus, if a government spends money on it, leading to not applied effectively. Secondly, many people have been motion sickness, they are not able to stay in a long time in the types of speed transportation. In addition to, the ticket fees of this vehicles might be high than normal, due to the quality justifies the prices. From that obviously many poor inhabitants might be impossible using it. On the other hand, other major are more crucial and need to be invested from a government such as education, health, entertainment…and so on. A government should be focusing on them because enhancing knowledge of local people helps obviously increasing GPA of each country. Meanwhile, the country’s comprehensive development and success can be measured by looking at the health, well-being, and happiness of its resident. Hence, the investment of governments on those might be really necessary for nation. In conclusion, the administration spends money on faster means of public transport that is not applied effectively for all of the road system and all local people. Instead of spending money on this, the government should invest on other important things.
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People
have
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different
views about spending
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money
on a budget of its
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government
. While it
is argued
that a
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government
should invest on speed forms of public transport, I support the
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idea
that the
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money
of
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government
should be
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used
on
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other
importance.

There are two main reasons why a
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government
should not invest into speed transportation.
Firstly
, it is not suitable for almost road systems,
especially
in
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many
nations have the narrow road systems and have not private lane for the public transport.
Thus
, if a
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government
spends
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money
on it, leading to not applied
effectively
.
Secondly
,
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many
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people
have been motion sickness, they are not able to stay in a long time in the types of speed transportation.
In addition
to, the ticket fees of this vehicles might be
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high
than normal, due to the quality justifies the prices. From that
obviously
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many
poor inhabitants might be impossible using it.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
major are more crucial and need to
be invested
from a
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government
such as education, health, entertainment…and
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so
on. A
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government
should be focusing on them
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because
enhancing knowledge of local
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people
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helps
obviously
increasing GPA of each country. Meanwhile, the country’s comprehensive development and success can
be measured
by looking at the health, well-being, and happiness of its resident.
Hence
, the investment of
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governments
on those might be
really
necessary for nation.

In conclusion
, the administration spends
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money
on faster means of public transport
that is
not applied
effectively
for
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all of the
road system and all local
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people
.
Instead
of spending
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money
on this, the
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government
should invest on
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other
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important
things.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that government should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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